Greatest fear - WIP
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Hello everyone!
I wanted to have your opinion on my sketch for "greatest fear". I chose the "fear of rejection": a teenager who is in love, but TERRIFIED of talking to his crush.
This is still a very rough sketch, don't be afraid to critique!
Thanks for your input!
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I think there is too much separation between the boy and girl. It is hard to tell if he is hiding from her, or the kids to the far right. I would get closer to the boy in the locker, and have it to where the viewer is almost in the locker with him as he peeks out around the door at her. That way you would be able to show her face more, and get the three kids more in the background.
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@tombarrettillo Good point! I will try that!
I was also planing on having a picture of her in his locker so that it is clearer who he is hiding from!
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@nowayme Great concept for Fear. I was definitely thinking picture in the locker as well. Maybe you could turn her around so we can see her face better, and make the connection between her and her photo in the locker. Also, maybe she could be talking to those guys, or holding hands with one (because there's nothing worse then having a crush on someone who's dating someone else). Just thoughts...
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@tombarrettillo Your comment was spot on! I reworked it and I think it's better, what do you think ?
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yes, much better! I like the addition of the jock behind her. Look forward to seeing it colored.
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@nowayme yup, this is a good one.
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The newer version illustrates the concept much better. Great job!
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@nowayme on target concept, great work.
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You have such strong story telling. Great job love this one.
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Oh yes, the second one really illustrates his fear much better. Great job!
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ah my son is going through this right now LOL. The new version works really well. You always kill it!
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@nowayme The heart decorations on the ceiling are an awesome touch.
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Looking really good! Great image. Was definitely one of my worst fears growing up.
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Thanks everyone! Here is my semi-final sketch. Still have to put in the decorations and finish the pictures in the locker. Critiques are welcome
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@nowayme This is great! The interaction between the characters are clear and interesting. My only critique would be of the teen in love. He looks worried but not terrified.
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@nowayme Great composition, maybe the guys in foreground shoud to be bigger, or at least the head of the left one.
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Second one much better,I thought the first boy was being bullied (which would be a good fear) Great idea you have come up with.
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looking good. I would open the locker boy's eyes, looking toward the girl (even though he can't see her because of the door; makes the connection better). Also, I would turn both boys' heads in the foreground to the left. I assume the one on the left is looking at the boy in the locker, but his head turned right seems unnatural.
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@nowayme I love this! The concept is great, and the drawing itself is well done. My only criticism is of the guy spinning the ball on his fingertip. To me he looks like an adult rather than a teenager.
There were so many shy guys in my highschool. In my graduating year, three different guys signed my yearbook confessing they always had a crush on me but were too afraid to say anything. I was like 'awww - I wish you'd said something sooner!' And I was super shy myself, but still I was the one to ask guys to dance with me at school dances. haha The struggle is real.
Anyway - I can't wait to see it finished!
