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      brubenacker last edited by

      Hey Kat,
      It's painted in photoshop. Thanks for the feedback I appreciate it.

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      • Chip Valecek
        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @brubenacker last edited by

        @brubenacker welcome to the forums!


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        • Art Dud
          Art Dud @brubenacker last edited by

          @brubenacker This is an awesome concept. Just a couple items that stood out. The right arm/hand is too small. It doesn't quite match the perspective. A darker edged where the duck floaty meets his body would create a better illusion of wrapping around. Also the shadow angle on the tennis ball doesn't seem to match the other two. Cute pic. I love the variety of shapes and textures you have going on.

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          • tombarrettillo
            tombarrettillo last edited by

            cute! Reminds me of Randy in "A Christmas Story". If you keep the bird (which I like), I suggest moving the dog to the right a bit to balance the image, and give some space to the bird. Also, I would tilt the bird's head up more so he is looking at the dog's face. Adding the dog's tail might increase the cute factor. None of the shadows' angles match. The tennis ball seems to be floating or on a separate plane (maybe the shadow). And lastly, the right flipper needs to be fixed so it does not look like the heel is off the ground.

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              brubenacker @tombarrettillo last edited by

              @tombarrettillo Yeah nice catch on the heel. I had a darker shadow edge but must have painted it out when fussing with that shadow. Boston Terriers just have little nubs for tails so nothing to see. I definitely was uncomfortable with the shadow angles I'll have to fool around with them. I guess with the bird I was thinking more like he was checking out the weird yellow duck. But maybe having him look directly at the dogs face would work better.
              Thanks for the feedback

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                brubenacker @Art Dud last edited by

                @art-dud Yes the right hand is off. I think I was being lazy on it thanks for keeping me honest. I'll work on those shadows some more. Thanks for taking the time to respond

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                  brubenacker @Chip Valecek last edited by

                  @chip-valecek Thanks

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                  • TessaW
                    TessaW @brubenacker last edited by

                    @tombarrettillo pretty much summed up what I was going to say- mainly about shifting the dog to the left and tilting the bird's head up a bit. I don't think the seagull needs to be looking at the dog's face and I think it's a good idea for it to be looking at the duck's face, but to me, it looks like the seagull is gazing below the duck's head. I also agree with Kat's comments about the neck blending in with the waves.

                    Overall it's really cute though! You are a really skilled painter and now it's all about tweaking things here and there to make it the best piece possible.

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                      brubenacker @TessaW last edited by

                      @tessw Thank you, I stare at these things so long sometimes the simplest things slip by. I'm glad to finally seek some critiques I think it will really help.

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                      • DOTTYP
                        DOTTYP last edited by

                        Hello and welcome your painting is really cute I love it,but I do agree with Art dud I think his paws could be a bit bigger.This is a lovely idea and i like the seagull studying him.

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