Need some help with a piece
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I really dig the concept and the composition is powerful. I think maybe bringing the moon back to help the violinist stand out more could be cool. Also, if the smoke kind of meandered into the sky that might eliminate the sharp direction it's giving off.
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Hi Eric!
I love this piece
However, there's a few element in your original piece that I like better than the new version. Like @Spencer-Hale and @adamdohrmann , I would definitely bring the moon back behind the guy (or lighten the sky and make him darker). I would also find a way to have the cat against the sky again (as oppose to having houses behind) as I feel he was reading much better then. Of course, your handling of light, color, perspective and just global rendering is way better in the new version, but the composition was a little stronger in the original on these two points. Great work
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Awesome feedback everyone!! I will take everything everyone said and put a few changes to it and update up you all soon. Thanks again.
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So I added the moon in, and before I put much more detail in I wanted to see what people thought. I moved the middle smoke stream a bit so that it doesn’t imply too much wind. I assume that a little breeze would push the smoke, but not his jacket. Or, I can just assume that he is really into his music and flinging his butt in such a way that the coat moves that way (idk lol)
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Nice! the main guy stands out much better now. Now I'd take a look at the cat and see You can make is stand out more too.
I tried to do a quick and ugly photoshop adjustment to see how you could approach it.
i lightened the houses and enlarged the cat a bit to frame him better an avoid some tangents
I really like the warm/cool diffence between the characters. maybe you could push that some more as well.
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@eric-castleman Better with the moon, though I think it works better brighter like the original. And is this digital?
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@spencer-hale great idea. That is what I will do.
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Here it is with the houses lightened up. Next I will work on the cat a bit more.
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This looks so stunning. Amazing job!
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@eric-castleman Hi Eric, This is a really nice piece and I think it might have more impact if the cat were bigger than the cricket...right now there're about the same size on the page. Your cat has more character than mine but I think you could stylize the profile better than from straight behind the cat? I don't know - judgement call? Also I don't think you need rim lighting to highlight everything - I think you have enough plane changes to do it with value. Hope this helps...
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@will-terry thanks for your time!! I like the direction you took this, and is very similar to the other critiques I recieved from Lee White. I will rework it with your recommendation.
