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    • Cory Shaw
      Cory Shaw last edited by Cory Shaw

      I thought I would post this here and ask for feedback. The problem is often I finish something and I feel really good about it, but then the next day I hate it. I don't know why I don't like it, so I am asking for your help if you have any ideas. There is no specific purpose or goal behind this piece except to explore my coloring and digital sketching process.

      0_1512412585295_jpgSword of Light.jpg

      Thank you!

      https://www.corysshaw.com/
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      • Sarah LuAnn
        Sarah LuAnn SVS OG last edited by

        This is a fun piece! Its a style that makes me think of comics. You have a really strong silhouette in your composition as well--simple but it works. No distraction from your main character.

        The main thing that jumps out at me for fixing is the character's pose. I feel like it would make more sense if the legs were not bending in the same direction like they are--he looks wobbly, like he's mid-fall. There are a couple proportion things that seem a little off as well--the arms seem quite long compared to the legs and torso.

        Hope this helps. 🙂 Thanks for showing your work!

        sarahluann.com

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        • Cory Shaw
          Cory Shaw last edited by

          @Sarah-LuAnn Thanks! I was aware of the proportion issue during my sketch, but I couldn't figure out how to get his hands over his head without making him look too long. I wanted him to look young. Originally the arms were shorter, but they overlapped the face and that hurt the silhouette.

          https://www.corysshaw.com/
          https://www.instagram.com/corysshaw/
          https://twitter.com/corysshaw/
          https://www.pinterest.com/corysshaw/

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          • aska
            aska @Cory Shaw last edited by

            @cory-shaw I like the composition and colors. Overall it looks interesting 🙂 However I agree with @Sarah-LuAnn that his pose could be improved. I thought that while legs show the weight of the sword, his body above waist doesn't. His corpse looks too straight for me. But thats only me, i am not very experience myself, so i might be wrong. Nevertheless, you should definitely not hate this piece and push yourself to improve it in a way that you will be satisfied. Few days break and starting a different piece are always good for it 🙂

            Aska
            www.mugaska.com
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            • Cory Shaw
              Cory Shaw @aska last edited by

              @aska Thank you for your help! I will definitely spend more time on the sketch in the future.

              https://www.corysshaw.com/
              https://www.instagram.com/corysshaw/
              https://twitter.com/corysshaw/
              https://www.pinterest.com/corysshaw/

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