Kid Lit 411 illustration

[Joy Heyer]

Very cute! I like it. The movement and expressions are wonderful. I do think the second 1 in 411 should be moved a little to the left. I can't wait to see it in color!

[RHirsch]

@chip-valecek That's an interesting point, I'll play with it. Thanks!

[RHirsch]

@joy-heyer Thanks! I'm looking at it again and I might warp the letters to follow the flow of the bar staff, so they aren't so straight up and down. It might work, it might not. Worth playing with. At this stage, nothing's set in stone.

[RHirsch]

Coming along...

[MirkaH]

@rhirsch id make the letters a bit bigger, so they are easier to spot right away

[DanetteDraws]

Super cute @RHirsch! Great composition too.
I agree with @MirkaH about the letters not standing out enough. I'd probably make them solid black myself so that they're not the same colour as the birds. It would be cool too if you made the 'I's and '1's look like musical notes - just a thought

[TraciVW]

So much fun. love the cheering colors and playful birds. I would like to see the letters thicker.

[Kelanhordos]

Looks great, I can't help but think if the music bar had some more movement to it, like a wave almost, it would help lead the eye through the picture in a more pleasing way. I feel that both shapes arcing in kind of a mirror is fighting a bit for my eye to follow them both.

Keep it up

[RHirsch]

@danettedraws Yeah, I tried that. It's not as legible, unfortunately, because it's a fun idea.

[RHirsch]

Agreed all, I will make the letters bigger, and alter either the wire or the bar staff so they don't mirror each other. Thanks for the advice.

[Gary Wilkinson]

Is the space between the "kid lit 411" and the wire needed for something later? If not it seems like wasted space to me

[rcartwright]

@gary-wilkinson Filling a space just to fill it would be a waste, nothing wrong with having spaces

[RHirsch]

Finished piece and did the possible FB banner as well. Submitting tomorrow, thanks for the extra eyes.

[Eric Castleman]

Loving it!!

[Chip Valecek]

@rhirsch turned out great!

[Kelanhordos]

Looks great