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    • Gary Wilkinson
      Gary Wilkinson last edited by

      Some great work here and although both are great, my personal preference is with the 2nd comp, but that's not to say it couldn't be improved upon. I agree with Tessa that the first comp has more movement to it as though we are part of the action, but it feels a bit too busy and almost dizzying to me. I find it hard to choose where I want to focus on, but maybe if the monster's door was larger it would help give more variety to the shapes and sizes of the characters in the scene and reduce the busyness of the rocks.

      The 2nd comp is much more geared towards a book cover piece, although as Tessa also mentioned, there is a bit more of a disconnect between the kids and the monster and I feel like I would want to see a hit of interaction between the upper and lower part of the scene, such as the dog noticing something eerie below, markings on the trees to show something is living near there etc.

      Whatever you do, please keep that cute dog 😛

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      • braden H
        braden H last edited by

        Thank you all for the feedback! It's interesting to see how different people read and react to the two different attempts. I'm gonna go back and respond to a few specific people in a little bit.

        But for now, work progresses 🙂

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        • braden H
          braden H @rcartwright last edited by

          @rcartwright

          Fair enough 🙂 I agree that the first composition was more interesting. Definitely something to think about for next time.

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          • braden H
            braden H @Jon Anderson last edited by

            @jon-anderson

            Thanks! I think I'll be able to finish the second piece before the end of the month. I'll have to see about adding something to make it a little less even.

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            • MichaelMattocks
              MichaelMattocks last edited by

              the perspective on the door's is really throwing me off. Does the door open downward?

              Michael Mattocks
              Https://instagram.com/mattocksdesign/

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              • braden H
                braden H @Heather Boyd last edited by braden H

                @TessaW Interesting reads on the two of them! It's neat how slight changes can make such a difference in the perceived story.

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                • braden H
                  braden H @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                  @gary-wilkinson

                  The cute dog is most certainly there to stay 🙂 Thanks for the feedback!

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                  • braden H
                    braden H last edited by

                    @michaelmattocks

                    Yeah, in the first piece the door was a little wonky 🙂

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                    • braden H
                      braden H last edited by

                      Work continues! Next step is detailing the monstery area.

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                      • MichaelMattocks
                        MichaelMattocks @braden H last edited by MichaelMattocks

                        @art-of-b I feel like there should be some faint green like on the objects around the hole. The characters are fantastic!

                        Michael Mattocks
                        Https://instagram.com/mattocksdesign/

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