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    The odds that he will get away are rather small - hidden WIP

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    • MichaelMattocks
      MichaelMattocks @Jonas Zavacky last edited by

      @jonas-zavacky I think you lose the focus now. in the top one you have a character at the end of the alley which draws your attention. your hidden guy is cropped and looks like you are hiding him in the composition. Dropping the view done changes the feel.

      Michael Mattocks
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      • Jonas Zavacky
        Jonas Zavacky @MichaelMattocks last edited by

        @michaelmattocks hmm, I see what you mean. We'll see how I will manage that. Maybe I can make the character that is hiding be almost lost in shadow and left the stuff that is important only so the feel may be close. The character in the alley will be there too.

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        • Jonas Zavacky
          Jonas Zavacky last edited by

          alright... this is it for the background i think.. any advice before I add the characters? πŸ™‚
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          • Jonas Zavacky
            Jonas Zavacky last edited by Jonas Zavacky

            alright πŸ˜ƒ I changed the lighting as it doesn't looked like a night scene
            0_1532805611125_hidden background.jpg

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            • leothejediartist
              leothejediartist last edited by

              I'm digging this but I'm also torn. I did like how the composition of the original post looked, but I think the most updated scene has alot more feeling to it, more atmosphere. Can't wait to see the finished piece πŸ‘

              One man's crap is another man's manure...or something like that
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              • Jonas Zavacky
                Jonas Zavacky @leothejediartist last edited by Jonas Zavacky

                @leothejediartist I totally see what you mean! πŸ˜ƒ But well... I decided to go for the second composition. (it is not I don't like the current result)

                Thank you πŸ™‚

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                • leothejediartist
                  leothejediartist last edited by

                  I totally support the decision lol didn't mean to sound negative. Unrelated related point, is Akira on Netflix or anything? I've never seen it

                  One man's crap is another man's manure...or something like that
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                  • AbbyLucero
                    AbbyLucero last edited by

                    This is so spot on! Love the composition and atmosphere with the new lighting. Can’t wait to see how it looks composited all together! πŸ˜ƒ

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                    • Jonas Zavacky
                      Jonas Zavacky @leothejediartist last edited by

                      @leothejediartist hehe okay πŸ˜ƒ πŸ˜ƒ well I don't know if it is on Netflix, but if you just search "akira online" there should be results πŸ˜ƒ

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                      • Jonas Zavacky
                        Jonas Zavacky @AbbyLucero last edited by

                        @abbylucero Thank you so much Abby!! πŸ˜ƒ

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                        • Donfito
                          Donfito @Jonas Zavacky last edited by Donfito

                          @jonas-zavacky

                          definitely the last color composition, it looks more mysterious, purple is a good color too make this kind of feelings too.
                          waiting to see the final result.

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                          • Jonas Zavacky
                            Jonas Zavacky @Donfito last edited by

                            @donfito hey! thanks I agree. I already posted the final result into the challenge thread πŸ™‚

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