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    • juliekitzes
      juliekitzes last edited by

      I think it's really nicely done. I like the composition and idea, your animals/figures are really cute and full of character, and I like the textures you've got going. My one suggestion would be to up the contrast a little (particularly darken some areas in the background like under the van and behind the animal characters) to make the firelight really pop. Additionally I might give the van a specific shadow or reduce the lighting on the bottom of the wheel or something because it's giving the impression that the van is sort of floating and not grounded.

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      • Eric Castleman
        Eric Castleman last edited by Eric Castleman

        This is awesome!

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          Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Kevin Longueil last edited by

          @kevin-longueil Thank you. It means a lot to me.

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            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @juliekitzes last edited by

            @juliekitzes hi julie! Thank you so much!. I’ll make sure to take note all that you said. Thanks!

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              Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Eric Castleman last edited by

              @eric-castleman hi, eric! Thank you so much!

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              • Jabbernewt
                Jabbernewt last edited by

                Wow, great work! I'm relatively novice with color, but I can see what you've done here is appropriate, and your forms generally seem well-done. As with some of the other critiques, I might suggest beefing up the contrast, especially with the lower shadows. The colors all seem to be fairly midtone-based, which works well for the light of a campfire, but contrast will emphasize it and make the image more punchy 🙂 Other than that, the subtlety of the fur looks good and puffy to me! (though others might have more useful critique for the texture. My spidey sense is tingling)

                I can't wait to see what you'll do with this already well-positioned piece!

                Pax

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                  Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Jabbernewt last edited by

                  @jabbernewt hi, jabber! Thank you so much. I’ll definitely consider your critique. I’m currently working on the contrast. I might be able to post the piece in a short while. Again, thank you!

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                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                    Here’s the revised illustration:
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                      Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                      I darkened the shadows, added brighter higlights, improved the grounds, added a few details to the van, and brigthen the stars. I hope you guys like it.

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                      • Donfito
                        Donfito last edited by

                        beautiful piece, idea and concept.

                        If I can give you a little comment, I think you could add more contrast only in the trees so you can separate the front with the background.

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