Society of Visual Storytelling

    SVSLearn Forums

    • Register
    • Login
    • Search
    • Recent
    • Tags
    • Popular
    • Users
    • Groups
    • Search

    Portfolio piece in progress feedback

    Artwork
    6
    9
    1225
    Loading More Posts
    • Oldest to Newest
    • Newest to Oldest
    • Most Votes
    Reply
    • Reply as topic
    Log in to reply
    This topic has been deleted. Only users with topic management privileges can see it.
    • E
      EmilyM last edited by

      Hey all!
      I've been working on this piece off and on for a few weeks, I'd like to do more thumbnails but frankly, time/energy/self-imposed-deadlines, this is as good as it's gonna get! Unless I get some ideas from feedback..!

      What you need to know about the scene. It's the first time the little boy sees a beautiful awe inspiring queen/princess. I want the sight of her to floor this kid. Which thumbnail does that best? Is there anything I could do to push it more? The bottom three you just see the hem of her skirt.

      Thanks for taking the time to read this!

      0_1533393022968_sketch1533392814123.png

      Chip Valecek 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
      • Chip Valecek
        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @EmilyM last edited by

        @emilym I am liking row one, the first one and row 2 the first one. I think those read the best to me.


        https://www.instagram.com/chipvalecek/
        https://www.facebook.com/cvalecek
        http://www.cshellmedia.com/

        E 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
        • E
          EmilyM @Chip Valecek last edited by

          @chip-valecek thanks for the feedback!

          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
          • stringfellowart
            stringfellowart SVS OG last edited by

            I think the first one is good. Being able to see his expression so we know what to feel. And her face maybe in three quarter view, not quite revealed, like a tease. You could have the next illustration be just her, in all her beautiful glory. Bigger impact.

            Bringing whimsical creatures to life.
            www.stringfellowart.com
            www.instagram/stringfellowart

            1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
            • Nyrryl  Cadiz
              Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

              Personally i like the middle thumbnail at the top. I can’t wait to see your progress.

              Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
              Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
              YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

              1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
              • braden H
                braden H last edited by

                Second row, first thumbnail is my fav.

                I would work it so that the kid is silhouetted between two banisters instead of having one directly behind his head. Though this may make it a little too perfectly framed...

                Ayhoo, nice work so far!

                1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                • E
                  EmilyM last edited by EmilyM

                  Thanks so much for the feedback so afar! Here's an update, I worked the first thumbnail up into a sketch. Then did a few color studies. The top left color study you can see I fixed the composition just a smidge. Feedback is welcome and appreciated! What's working and what's not?

                  0_1536004343961_sketch1536004126226.png

                  0_1536004855129_sketch1536004778383 (1).jpg

                  1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                  • KathrynAdebayo
                    KathrynAdebayo last edited by

                    I like the colors and composition of the first one! The open space of the wall is nice. πŸ™‚ The queen's head a bit lower, as you have in the first image, reads well. If you do go with this composition, I would just suggest scaling the size of the boy as well so their sizes seem proportional.

                    E 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                    • E
                      EmilyM @KathrynAdebayo last edited by

                      @kathrynadebayo

                      Yup yup, totally agree with that. Thanks for the feedback! I noticed the size difference after I posted, will for sure fix that. πŸ™‚

                      1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                      • First post
                        Last post