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    • lmrush
      lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

      I love 3, but they are all fabulous!

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        A Former User @smceccarelli last edited by

        @smceccarelli I'll be honest, I'm not sure 100% as to why, but #3 feels like a well rounded character in terms of personality. They're all great, but that #3 has something about it, the "it" factor. Fan of your work!

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        • djlambson
          djlambson last edited by

          #3 stands out for me as well..there's something there that relays confidence and strength. I can't wait to watch this progress!

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          • clipant
            clipant last edited by

            2 or 5 but now that I think about it I might be swayed by both poses having her casually resting two-by-fours on one shoulder supported by one arm while the other rests by her side. What I mean is that I might be more influenced by the pose than the character design.

            Not a professional illustrator, trying to see how good I can become.
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            • ?
              A Former User last edited by

              #1 and #5 are my favorites. They show the most emotion to me. 🙂

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              • kaitlinmakes
                kaitlinmakes last edited by

                Number 1 - she just looks so smart and determined! But they all have wonderful charm.
                If the clientele is so young, is it best to go with a more simplistic version like number 6?

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                • markoman
                  markoman last edited by

                  number 3

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                  • demotlj
                    demotlj SVS OG last edited by

                    Clearly from the diversity of opinions, you are going to have to write 6 books or give your character five friends! I love them all.

                    Laurie DeMott
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                    • K
                      Kat SVS OG last edited by

                      I like #5 the best. Love the hair!

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                      • smceccarelli
                        smceccarelli Pro SVS OG last edited by

                        Thank you all so much for the great feedback and comments! That made the next step so much easier. So I went for 5 but bringing in elements of 3 and 6. Here is a color (final) version, a couple of sketches and one sample spread I'm probably going to bring to finish....if I manage in the time left.
                        Obviously I don't have a lot of time to incorporate any feedback, but if you see glaring opportunities for improvement, let me know!
                        Ah, the stick she's holding is sort of the core of the story 🙂

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                        • TessaW
                          TessaW last edited by

                          Love it! Thanks for sharing it here. 😃

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                          • ScribblesByMike
                            ScribblesByMike last edited by

                            3 and 6 were my top choices but i love what you've done to get the final result. She looks great!

                            Strange things are afoot at the Circle K!

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                              • chrisaakins
                                chrisaakins last edited by

                                I really like it. She looks like a hard worker and super smart. I still miss the freckles, though. I look forward to seeing what you do with your story.

                                Chris Akins
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                                • smceccarelli
                                  smceccarelli Pro SVS OG last edited by

                                  Last update and last piece of feedback: which version would you use? It's only slight changes in the BG vs FG balance.
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                                  • NoWayMe
                                    NoWayMe last edited by

                                    The first or last one! Or maybe an in-between ? I like that the BG is pulled back on the first two although in the second one I feel it's definitely too much. The first one is better, but maybe still a tad too much ? Or maybe the FG character is a little too saturated..

                                    I love what you came up with for the character! I was too late for the pool, but my pick were also 5 and 3. I love how it turned out!

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                                    • juliepeelart
                                      juliepeelart SVS OG @smceccarelli last edited by

                                      @smceccarelli This is fantastic! I love the way you are able to capture so many expressions and people. I like 1 and 3, but it really depends on the story you are telling. To me the first one emphasizes the main character. She is headed off page and seems to have her own idea, and maybe a better idea of what to do than the others. The third shows that she is working together with all of these other people. It is a fun jumble. My kids would have a great time noticing what each person is doing in that one.

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                                        aaimiller last edited by

                                        Can you fade out the background just behind her? So it's like #1 behind her, and a little lighter than #3 for the rest?

                                        The contrast is very improtant to identify the MC. If this were in the middle of a book, #3 would be fine. At the beginning #1 or #2.

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                                        • Jason Bowen
                                          Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

                                          I like #2 👍

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                                          • ArtofJoseGalue
                                            ArtofJoseGalue @smceccarelli last edited by

                                            @smceccarelli definitely number 2, the muted background helps me find the focus of the piece

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