Character Design - Feedback Welcome
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#3 stands out for me as well..there's something there that relays confidence and strength. I can't wait to watch this progress!
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2 or 5 but now that I think about it I might be swayed by both poses having her casually resting two-by-fours on one shoulder supported by one arm while the other rests by her side. What I mean is that I might be more influenced by the pose than the character design.
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#1 and #5 are my favorites. They show the most emotion to me.
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Number 1 - she just looks so smart and determined! But they all have wonderful charm.
If the clientele is so young, is it best to go with a more simplistic version like number 6? -
number 3
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Clearly from the diversity of opinions, you are going to have to write 6 books or give your character five friends! I love them all.
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I like #5 the best. Love the hair!
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Thank you all so much for the great feedback and comments! That made the next step so much easier. So I went for 5 but bringing in elements of 3 and 6. Here is a color (final) version, a couple of sketches and one sample spread I'm probably going to bring to finish....if I manage in the time left.
Obviously I don't have a lot of time to incorporate any feedback, but if you see glaring opportunities for improvement, let me know!
Ah, the stick she's holding is sort of the core of the story
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Love it! Thanks for sharing it here.
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3 and 6 were my top choices but i love what you've done to get the final result. She looks great!
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I really like it. She looks like a hard worker and super smart. I still miss the freckles, though. I look forward to seeing what you do with your story.
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Last update and last piece of feedback: which version would you use? It's only slight changes in the BG vs FG balance.
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The first or last one! Or maybe an in-between ? I like that the BG is pulled back on the first two although in the second one I feel it's definitely too much. The first one is better, but maybe still a tad too much ? Or maybe the FG character is a little too saturated..
I love what you came up with for the character! I was too late for the pool, but my pick were also 5 and 3. I love how it turned out!
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@smceccarelli This is fantastic! I love the way you are able to capture so many expressions and people. I like 1 and 3, but it really depends on the story you are telling. To me the first one emphasizes the main character. She is headed off page and seems to have her own idea, and maybe a better idea of what to do than the others. The third shows that she is working together with all of these other people. It is a fun jumble. My kids would have a great time noticing what each person is doing in that one.
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Can you fade out the background just behind her? So it's like #1 behind her, and a little lighter than #3 for the rest?
The contrast is very improtant to identify the MC. If this were in the middle of a book, #3 would be fine. At the beginning #1 or #2.
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I like #2
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@smceccarelli definitely number 2, the muted background helps me find the focus of the piece
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@smceccarelli Really depends on what you mean to emphasisze here. For example, if you mean to emphasize the character and her individuality, I might pick two because she's nicely singled out. If the narrative was more, "just like anyone else," I think I might pick 1 because it's a nice balance between the contrast of 2 and the busyness of 3. 3 is just too similar from background to foreground for me to say it'd be good to use besides maybe the inside cover of the book or something, where the character is already recognized as important, and can be found by the observant reader
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I like the 2nd one, although I think the girl is a little too over saturated and perhaps the hues are a touch too yellow in her face which is causing issues by having the yellow planks behind her. Maybe if the bandana was a different colour that may help that issue though. Of course as @Jabbernewt said the choice is based on what, or who you want to emphasis, but if it's the girl then I would say the 2nd one. It's beautifully done though and it's always great seeing your working process
