Halloween illustration-WIP (feedback requested)
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I love the 3 original thumbnails. They feel like a sequence in a comic book. There is a strong sense of story when the 3 thumbnails were next to each other. I read as a story about a lonely ghost mom and a ghost child watching other kids having fun. The ghost child really wanted to join the trick and treat party with the other kids. Ghost mom however knew the rule: ghost can not play with human. It is a great beginning for a story. What would mom do to help the child not feeling left out? does the ghost child find a way to play with the other kids after all?
Your later illustration has a great atmosphere as well. But it is less clear to me what the story is about. Maybe because the facial expression of the ghost girl is ambivalence. Is she scared, or longing for something? I am not sure.
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@xin-li thank you for your feedbacks. Your point of view is so interesting. I didn't think the story also can turn out that way (from my first 3 thumbnails).
I totally agree with the point you've mentioned. I tried to fix the facial expression of the ghost a little bit but after all, I think the ambivalence of the ghost is probably also can let the viewers build their own perception (like how you came with interesting story from my thumbnails). So I decide to go with it, thank you again
@alexsen thank you! I just finished it now and as your feedback, I made the ghost more transparent.
Here is the final version:
