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    • Nyrryl  Cadiz
      Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

      I’ve been trying to finish it, too. If time permits, i’ll make another piece similar to option #1 but with a slightly dufierrent concept. Then, i’ll let you guys decide which one i should use for the contest. I hope you like this. It’s still a work in progress. Please let me know your thoughts and critiques. They’re highly appreciated.

      Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
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      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by Nyrryl Cadiz

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        Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
        Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
        YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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        • Nyrryl  Cadiz
          Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

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          Hi, everybody! I’ve been playing around with this new sketch. Any thoughts?

          Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
          Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
          YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

            Hi, everbody! I need your help. Which lighting do think i should go with? Option A is fun but perhaps it doesn’t sell the ‘misunderstood monster’ theme enough. What do you think of option B? Thanks everybody. Please let me know which one you guys prefer.

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            Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
            Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
            YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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            • Gary Wilkinson
              Gary Wilkinson @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

              @nyrrylcadiz Very late to this, but first I wanted to say that I really like the piece you did with the flying dog 🙂

              Going back to your original concepts, I think that 1 had the best read. I also liked 3 as I thought it was a nice snapshot into a bigger story.

              I don't think that you needed to expand the frame to include the other objects and monsters in no.1, as it feels like there is too much story and the main concept has been lost somewhat.

              the new sketch of the kid been told off by his parents is also very promising, but perhaps it would work better in portrait rather than landscape as the composition is getting divided up into quarters.

              In regards to the cat and mice one, i'm not exactly sure what the story is about. On first read it kinda reminded me of the crazy cat lady from the simpsons who throws cats at the children. I don't know if you decided to veer away from the competition title (which is fine if you have a great concept) but is the cat good or bad and which character is misunderstood? Also why is the candy/chocolate she is holding in the shape of mice? Is it following the same story of hansel and gretel or is the cat witch (?) actually nice and the mice just got shocked and decided to run away once they saw the chocolate mice.

              I love the design you did of the house, but it has much more detail than the foreground elements which I feel is causing issues with the composition. I would much rather see the characters much closer to the house and interacting with it in some way as it seems a shame to be just used as a background object.

              In regards to the lighting, it depends on what is the story you are trying to tell. I don't think that either lighting scheme helps narrate the story and I would go back to working on it in black and white to do a few value studies first, rather than working on the details before the main idea has been told.

              I hope this critique didn't come off as super negative. I think you have the skill set to get a great piece done and it feels like you are spending a lot of time working on the details before the foundation has been built.

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              • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Gary Wilkinson last edited by Nyrryl Cadiz

                @gary-wilkinson Thanks! You’re sharing you honest opinion and I appreciate that. I really feel lost on what to do with the piece. I felt there was really something not working and you straight up pointed them out. Again, thanks. It’s really nice to have a second pair of eyes on your piece. I guess I really am focusing more on the details rather than on the fundamentals. I was too excited to get started that i dove in and just winged it, hoping to figure things out as I go along.

                I’m really scared to scrap it the entire piece though and start from scratch. Plus, i guess I’m too emotionally attached to it now. LOL... Would you say the piece is still salvagable?

                Oh, as for the story, i guess it’s just pretty simple. The Witch wants to be friends with the mice and give the mice treats but the mice completely misunderstands her, thinking she’s trying to lure and eat them so they runaway.

                Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                • Nyrryl  Cadiz
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                  In order to make the house less attention grabbing i added a low opacity layer over it. What do you guys think?

                  Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                  Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                  YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                    Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                    Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                    YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                    • Gary Wilkinson
                      Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                      You would need to decided by yourself if an image should be restarted or scrapped. I have been in that situation many times and a lot of the times I kept working on a piece that I wasn't pleased with and wasn't happy with the final piece even though I had spent a lot more time on it than pieces that I did like. In the mushroom contest I had spent a lot of time on the original concept even though there was a feeling that something was wrong, so I just decided to scrap it and reworked it in a way that I felt was much better and I was able to paint in a more streamlined way.

                      My criticisms about your own painting are only my views, and others may see the work in a completely different light, but if you yourself feel as though you are stuck when you get into the detailing stage then it's usually a time to take a step by and ask if it's work the risk of time to continue or to restart and try to improve it.

                      In regards to the newest update of this painting I don't think that lowering the opacity of the house helps either way as it still remains the most detailed and well rendered part of the piece.

                      www.garywilkinsonart.com
                      www.instagram.com/gwillustration/
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                      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                        @gary-wilkinson i agree. I guess it all depends on me if i should scrap this piece or not. I really enjoyed working on it but i always felt something was wrong but not to the point that i hate it though. That’s why i’ve decided to not use this for the month’s contest. It just doesn’t work for the Misunderstoon Monster prompt but I won’t scrap it as well. I like it. I like the color choices i made and it’s a great bench mark for my current skill level. I’ll work on it some more so that i can post it on scoial media. I really don’t want let it go to waste. Thanks for your input, Gary! I believe they help me become a better artist.

                        Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                        Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                        YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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