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      adamshephard last edited by adamshephard

      Hello Everyone!

      I was hoping to get some feedback on a piece I've just finished.

      Here is my piece for Spyro: Reignited Trilogy, featuring Spyro, and an Elder Dragon. I'd appreciate any and all feedback, but please feel free to share your work as well.

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      • carriecopadraws
        carriecopadraws SVS OG last edited by

        I love Spyro, what a fun piece!

        Wings generally come out perpendicular to the body (that can be an arc depending on the flapping), so I think the wings could be rotated a bit, the back one more hidden, front one more vertical. Here are some Google image references of what I mean that are similar to the angle here.

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        Carrie Copa
        https://carriecopadraws.com/

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          adamshephard @carriecopadraws last edited by

          @carriecopa That’s great, thank you so much!

          I agree with the wings, I took the reference for them from a plane, rather than a bird. I think that’s where I went wrong (as there’s no motion in a planes wings).

          Love the references you’ve given, I’ve added them for later 🙂

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            robgale @adamshephard last edited by

            @adamshephard Nice work! I think your color harmony is nice, and I like the reds and purples world that you're working in. One thing I see is that Spyro is getting lost, ie blending in with the wing of the dragon, I want him to pop a lot more. It might be a matter of moving that wing in the back, or changing the value of Spyro vs. the dragon wing, or a combination of both. What I would be wary of is simply using a line of some sort of separate the two, it wouldn't be as strong as working out the value / color relationships of the different parts.

            What kind of effect are you going for? Do you have any artists that you're using as inspiration / that you aspire to be similar to?

            Cheers and nice work!

            Rob Gale
            instagram: www.instagram.com/robgalestudio/
            website: www.robgaleillustration.com

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              adamshephard @robgale last edited by

              @robgale I thought about using a Gaussian blur on the Elder Dragon to make Spyro stand out, but I agree that it’s the wing placement that’s causing him to sit back more.

              I was kind of going for a lineless picture, I’m inspired by Nicholas Koles work in terms of colour and values showing the variations in characters and adding depth.

              Thanks very much Rob!

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                theprairiefox last edited by

                I would agree with @robgale that the color harmony is very nice. One thing I noticed besides the wings is that the legs and tail on the Elder Dragon are not reading properly. It took me a while to figure out which piece was which. I think if you brought the tail up higher it would maybe clean it up. Put a little sky between the legs and tail.

                Fun piece, it looks like Sypro is going for a fun ride!

                -The Prairie Fox
                https://www.instagram.com/theprairiefox
                https://www.theprairiefox.com

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                  adamshephard @theprairiefox last edited by

                  @theprairiefox

                  That make sense, otherwise the tail and legs seem to merge into one.

                  I really appreciate all of these comments, I'm hoping to do another piece soon so they're all really helpful!

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                  • Jeanne.M.Bowman
                    Jeanne.M.Bowman @adamshephard last edited by

                    @adamshephard I like the lineless quality to this piece. I especially like the shapes of the larger dragons head (haven't played spyro since I was a kid, sorry for not knowing the names) Perhaps apply a grayscale mask to this piece to see where you are getting blending problems- like spyro's face into the wing and cloud below him. I think there is only just enough value difference between the two that it is making it hard to see. Perhaps lighten the sky a little as well- I think that would be a fast fix to help the shapes jump forward. Really, if you can study and follow the form principle (found in Andrew Loomis books) that will really help. I think this piece is nice and would be even lovelier with just a bit more tweaking.

                    instagram.com/jeanneillustrates
                    jeannebowmanillustrates.com

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                      adamshephard last edited by

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                      I did end up making some changes soon after but got to update. Thank you all for your help!

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                        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @adamshephard last edited by

                        @adamshephard great improvement

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                        • lmrush
                          lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

                          Great improvement, love the expression on the little guys face!

                          Lisa Rush
                          www.lisarushgallery.com
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