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    • carriecopadraws
      carriecopadraws SVS OG last edited by

      I love Spyro, what a fun piece!

      Wings generally come out perpendicular to the body (that can be an arc depending on the flapping), so I think the wings could be rotated a bit, the back one more hidden, front one more vertical. Here are some Google image references of what I mean that are similar to the angle here.

      0_1544734224863_birds-wings.png

      Carrie Copa
      https://carriecopadraws.com/

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        adamshephard @carriecopadraws last edited by

        @carriecopa That’s great, thank you so much!

        I agree with the wings, I took the reference for them from a plane, rather than a bird. I think that’s where I went wrong (as there’s no motion in a planes wings).

        Love the references you’ve given, I’ve added them for later 🙂

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        • robgale
          robgale @adamshephard last edited by

          @adamshephard Nice work! I think your color harmony is nice, and I like the reds and purples world that you're working in. One thing I see is that Spyro is getting lost, ie blending in with the wing of the dragon, I want him to pop a lot more. It might be a matter of moving that wing in the back, or changing the value of Spyro vs. the dragon wing, or a combination of both. What I would be wary of is simply using a line of some sort of separate the two, it wouldn't be as strong as working out the value / color relationships of the different parts.

          What kind of effect are you going for? Do you have any artists that you're using as inspiration / that you aspire to be similar to?

          Cheers and nice work!

          Rob Gale
          instagram: www.instagram.com/robgalestudio/
          website: www.robgaleillustration.com

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            adamshephard @robgale last edited by

            @robgale I thought about using a Gaussian blur on the Elder Dragon to make Spyro stand out, but I agree that it’s the wing placement that’s causing him to sit back more.

            I was kind of going for a lineless picture, I’m inspired by Nicholas Koles work in terms of colour and values showing the variations in characters and adding depth.

            Thanks very much Rob!

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            • theprairiefox
              theprairiefox last edited by

              I would agree with @robgale that the color harmony is very nice. One thing I noticed besides the wings is that the legs and tail on the Elder Dragon are not reading properly. It took me a while to figure out which piece was which. I think if you brought the tail up higher it would maybe clean it up. Put a little sky between the legs and tail.

              Fun piece, it looks like Sypro is going for a fun ride!

              -The Prairie Fox
              https://www.instagram.com/theprairiefox
              https://www.theprairiefox.com

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                adamshephard @theprairiefox last edited by

                @theprairiefox

                That make sense, otherwise the tail and legs seem to merge into one.

                I really appreciate all of these comments, I'm hoping to do another piece soon so they're all really helpful!

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                • Jeanne.M.Bowman
                  Jeanne.M.Bowman @adamshephard last edited by

                  @adamshephard I like the lineless quality to this piece. I especially like the shapes of the larger dragons head (haven't played spyro since I was a kid, sorry for not knowing the names) Perhaps apply a grayscale mask to this piece to see where you are getting blending problems- like spyro's face into the wing and cloud below him. I think there is only just enough value difference between the two that it is making it hard to see. Perhaps lighten the sky a little as well- I think that would be a fast fix to help the shapes jump forward. Really, if you can study and follow the form principle (found in Andrew Loomis books) that will really help. I think this piece is nice and would be even lovelier with just a bit more tweaking.

                  instagram.com/jeanneillustrates
                  jeannebowmanillustrates.com

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                    adamshephard last edited by

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                    I did end up making some changes soon after but got to update. Thank you all for your help!

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                    • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                      Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @adamshephard last edited by

                      @adamshephard great improvement

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                      • lmrush
                        lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

                        Great improvement, love the expression on the little guys face!

                        Lisa Rush
                        www.lisarushgallery.com
                        www.facebook.com/ArtbyLisaRush/
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