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    • Ace Connell
      Ace Connell last edited by Ace Connell

      It's looking lovely. I'd just be a bit more conscious of the texture throughout. If you look near the moon, there's a ton of texture, whereas the grass just looks like an airbrush gradient. I'm liking the composition. I think the leaves could maybe do to be a bit smaller, but the character design is lovely.

      Ace

      EDIT: Also the hedgehog... The spikes are amazingly textured and then the body looks a bit digital to me.

      Hope this helps.

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      • Thrace
        Thrace last edited by

        Lovely image! I would take the leaves out you don't need them and I would remove some of the texture around the moon. I love your characters, adorable!!

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        • Jana
          Jana last edited by

          My feeling is that the mood of fall would get a bit lost without the falling leaves. You might add then some fall related structure on the ground or more fall related colors, like with the acorn.

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          • Leontine
            Leontine last edited by

            adjusted version...more leaves on the soil?
            leontine gaasenbeek hedgehog 4.jpg

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            • Leontine
              Leontine @Jana last edited by

              @Jana danke schön Jana, soll ich weitere Blätter hinzufügen?

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              • Leontine
                Leontine @Jiří Kůs last edited by

                @Jiří-Kůs thank you, I ve worked on the piece a bit. How about now?

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                • Leontine
                  Leontine @Ace Connell last edited by

                  @Ace-Connell Hi Ace, worked on it a bit, what do you think?

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                  • Jana
                    Jana last edited by

                    Wow, Leontine, the piece improved even more. 🙂 I like the texture you have added to Miss Hedgehog.
                    Maybe two more leaves, like close to the stones... That might be fine.
                    Your German speaking brought me a big smile! 🙂

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                    • Leontine
                      Leontine @Jana last edited by

                      @Jana Thank you. Ill work on the leaves, thanks for the example! ich habe versucht, auf Deutsch zu schreiben, weil wir Nachbarn sind, Hoffentlich etwas was ich gelernt habe im schule is noch geblieben. XD

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                      • Jiří Kůs
                        Jiří Kůs @Leontine last edited by

                        @Leontine Moving that leaf did so much! I think it works now.

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                        • Leontine
                          Leontine @Jiří Kůs last edited by

                          @Jiří-Kůs thanks!

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                          • Leontine
                            Leontine last edited by

                            and the latest one leontine gaasenbeek hedgehog 5.jpg

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                            • Jana
                              Jana last edited by

                              Super! Sehr schön.😊

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                              • Dulcie
                                Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

                                @Leontine there are so many things to like about this piece 🙂 I love the way you’ve lit the scene, the way the moonlight shines through the leaves…the feel of glow from the lamp, also the design of the glowworm and the pencil texture 🙂 I think the moon is great. But the leaves do bother me, for a few reasons…the scene feels very still, like there is no wind, so less likely for leaves to fall….I actually don’t think you need the leaves in the composition even though they are beautifully drawn…though they do tie in with the brown of the hedgehog….maybe if at the top there was a branch visible with more leaves, to show where the falling leaves are coming from…I know that might be tricky to work in now you’ve taken the piece this far…if you extended the top of the frame then a branch could curve round and frame the picture nicely…just an idea though…

                                Other thing, the bush behind the glowworm might look better with more leafy texture on it…the glow from the lamp might catch some leaf outlines a bit more….maybe also by the hedgehog’s foot, could have a little more ground/grassy texture to show that it’s natural…..sorry this sounds like a lot of things! Just ideas, and really overall it is a lovely piece 🙂

                                PS. Wrote this comment before seeing latest version…the added texture/light on the hedgehog looks great 🙂

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                                • Naroth Kean
                                  Naroth Kean last edited by

                                  I really enjoy this piece the lighting is great! yes I agree leaves are a bit distracting to me as well. I think It might work if you actually make them fall a bit in distant because right now I am seeing one of the leaves is close to the size of the moon which kind of competing with each other. Banding trees a bit to the right might help to suggest sense of wind if you still want the leaves to be there.

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                                  • Ace Connell
                                    Ace Connell @Leontine last edited by

                                    @Leontine Yeah, it's definitely tying together now!

                                    The leaf above the hedgehog's head on first quick read looks like a ginormous leaf and that it's going behind the tree because of the same values of the leaf/tree and the brown thing in-between the trees that looks like it's the end of the stem of the leaf. It's not until you look at it that you notice it's two separate objects and in-front of the tree.

                                    I'd maybe make the leaves smaller too.

                                    It's really looking gorgeous now though!

                                    Ace

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                                    • Ace Connell
                                      Ace Connell last edited by Ace Connell

                                      Another thing too, if you squint your eyes, the biggest contrast is the secondary light hitting the spikes from the moon. That seems to jump out a little too much for me and because of the contrast becomes the focal point, so I'd tone down that light a bit so it doesn't distract from the face 🙂

                                      Ace

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                                      • Rachael Moody
                                        Rachael Moody last edited by

                                        Loving everything you've done so far! the soft playfulness of this piece is very charming!
                                        My only suggestion right now would be to curl the tail of the glow worm to the front. This way that bright light is not behind/away from the two character's faces, dragging the eyes away from their interaction. Make sense? Hope this helps!

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                                        • Leontine
                                          Leontine @Rachael Moody last edited by

                                          @Rachael-Moody thanks!

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                                            Leontine @Ace Connell last edited by

                                            @Ace-Connell Thanks!

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