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    BIG WIP - critiques please?

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    • Kristin Wauson
      Kristin Wauson last edited by

      Thanks everyone for your help so far! Here is the progress. I never know when to call these things finished. Do you think it’s done? Any other suggestions? Thanks in advance!

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        Kat SVS OG @Kristin Wauson last edited by

        @kristin-wauson oh so cute! I love the expressions on both their faces.

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        • Chip Valecek
          Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Kristin Wauson last edited by

          @kristin-wauson I think it looks great! Love the texture you have going on. My only suggestion, and it may be hard at this point, but the cats head looks like its looking past the mouse. If you could just tweak the head a little to turn it.


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          • Aaron Pierce
            Aaron Pierce last edited by

            Absolutely gorgeous! I love your color pallet and the details on the beanstalk.

            The only thing that stuck out - and it's really just a personal opinion bit - is that the facial expression on the mouse changed from rough to finished. He seems a bit more unimpressed now, vs. confused and a little surprised in the first one. I liked that look of "Why are you freaking out?" In the first picture.

            But again, that is entirely a personal opinion bit! The pic is great and I really love this finished(?) product 😃

            -Aaron

            Aaron "Aarpie!" Pierce
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            • Kristin Wauson
              Kristin Wauson @Chip Valecek last edited by

              @chip-valecek hmm I think you’re right. I’ll see what I can do.

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              • Kristin Wauson
                Kristin Wauson last edited by

                @Aaron-Pierce Thank you! And on the expression, I think it’s because I gave him eyelids ... I thought it gave him more of a Henry the VIII smug expression, but I think you’re right. The original is better. I took them out. What do you think?

                @Chip-Valecek I shifted his eyeballs to see if I could avoid redoing his entire head. Do you think it works now?

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                • Chip Valecek
                  Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Kristin Wauson last edited by

                  @kristin-wauson yes that helped a lot!


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                  • Kristin Wauson
                    Kristin Wauson last edited by

                    Yay! Thanks for looking at it!

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                    • Aaron Pierce
                      Aaron Pierce last edited by

                      Perfection! 😃 Love it 😃

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                      • Erin.Cortese
                        Erin.Cortese Moderator @Kristin Wauson last edited by

                        @kristin-wauson I love it! It has a really great feel, the mouse is fantastic. For me the bottom left corner is very dark. The strong contrast makes the focal point pop, but then pulls my eye down.

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                        • Kristin Wauson
                          Kristin Wauson @Aaron Pierce last edited by

                          @aaron-pierce thank you!

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                          • Kristin Wauson
                            Kristin Wauson @Erin.Cortese last edited by

                            @inkandspatter thank you! I’m calling it done for now because I have other things I have to work on, but I will keep this in mind and maybe revise it a bit later. I appreciate your comments!

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