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    • joanie stone
      joanie stone last edited by

      I really like this piece and I think your character design is fantastic.

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      • Dulcie
        Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

        Ooh interesting points @Rich-Green, yes I see what you mean. In the first one hedgehog looks like he's staring forlornly at his only present...that connection gave you a clue about his thoughts. I agree maybe rearranging the furniture, eg swapping the bed with the tree/present, might help.

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          Leontine @Rich Green last edited by

          @Rich-Green I agree with you and try and place the tree on the other side. maybe place the bed somewhere else as well. During the weekend, Ill work on it!

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            Leontine @Dulcie last edited by

            @Dulcie Thank you, I agree and play around with it.

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            • Lee White
              Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

              I agree with Rich about moving some of the elements around. Moving the hedgehog over there was a composition fix. When you move a main character other things will definitely need to be adjusted around them.

              Really cool piece. Can't wait to see where you go with it! : )

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                Leontine @Lee White last edited by

                @Lee-White @Rich-Green Thank you again for your help. Now with all nice comments I can take it further!

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                • smoke
                  smoke last edited by

                  Naamloos-1.jpg
                  sorry for my crappy sketch but it should make my point clear !this is what i see, because the cap is over the lightbal, its sort of blocking the light so the cap and the ceiling on top of the lamp should be darker, i know you have bouncing light , but thats less stronger, and you should change the moon or redo it because that looks to digital and not rendered enough!
                  overall, i realy like your piece,love the details composition, the carcters looking adorable , your a great artist! but understanding light is hard, i also struggle with it, but where learning everyday!! 😉

                  smoke

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                    Leontine @Nancy Gormezano last edited by

                    @Nancy-Gormezano thank youuuu!

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                      Leontine @johntatulliart last edited by

                      @johntatulliart Thank you John!

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                        Leontine @smoke last edited by

                        @smoke Thank you! Yes, there's still a lot of work on this one!

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