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    • Chip Valecek
      Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @marine last edited by

      @marine looks awesome! It reads so much better now with the shadows.


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      • Coreyartus
        Coreyartus Moderator last edited by

        Wow--great work!! There's so much more atmosphere there--it really helps with the suspense. Good job!!!

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        • MOO
          MOO SVS OG @marine last edited by

          @marine I like it a lot! I need to learn shadow and light yet. Quite an accomplishment.

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          • marine
            marine last edited by

            Thank you so much! @Chip-Valecek @Coreyartus @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen

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            • sigross
              sigross @marine last edited by

              @marine This is a good angle as it creates tension. But you have made the owner invisible with her shadow. The light has to get past the owner to enter the room. So there would be a silhouette through the door pane.

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              • marine
                marine @sigross last edited by

                @sigross You're right! Thanks! I'll try to add the owner's shadow, hopefully it won't break the tension created by the shape of dog against the bright floor...

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                • marine
                  marine last edited by

                  I've added the shadow of the owner on the floor, I tried to not make it too strong. But does it feel right with the perspective? I feel like the top of her body should be larger but then there won't be much light left on the floor...

                  The_Moment_Before_2-3.jpg

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                  • Jason Bowen
                    Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

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                    Hey I think your painting is great. You might find this quick paint over helpful. I brought your character out of the shadow and I warmed your light up a bit with curves. also I toned down the shadows on the things on the floor. Its just a thought might help you 🙂

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                    • sigross
                      sigross @marine last edited by

                      @marine Being realistic with light does throw up hurdles to a composition! Another option is to create another light source to light up your character. Or use catch light on his ears and outline. The outside light would still spill onto the dogs face and body. Use a bit of artistic license.

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                      • sigross
                        sigross last edited by sigross

                        That light coming through the glass would spill onto stuff as light doesn't just stay in that box of the door pane. Here's a still from Spielberg movie Lincoln as he loves to play with light.

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                        • ?
                          A Former User last edited by

                          Really like how you've changed the lighting, I'm wondering whether the dog should be bigger seeing as though he's in the foreground? Maybe like this...
                          1556182675976-the_moment_before_2-3.jpg

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                          • marine
                            marine last edited by

                            Wow! Thank you so much guys for taking the time to give me feedback and draw over!! @Jason-Bowen @sigross @hannahmccaffery

                            So I tried to replicate and follow your advices :

                            The_Moment_Before-8copy.jpg

                            I've added rim light and try to do a "haze" of light, not really sure about how to do this last one though... But I liked the idea, it brings warmth.
                            Also I've enlarged the dog.
                            @Jason-Bowen you recommended to bring the dog out of the shadow but if the light source is coming from the door, dog should be in the dark?

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                            • Jason Bowen
                              Jason Bowen SVS OG @marine last edited by

                              @marine I like what you've done 🙂 . One thing I've learnt is you can bend lights and change them to whatever you want to tell your story 😉

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