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    • alicia
      alicia @chrisaakins last edited by

      @chrisaakins This is so great! Love the detail & colors! I think the issue with the pose is it pulls your eye to the left, but then there’s nothing catch it or to pull it back onto the canvas. What if you scoot him over to the right & have something appearing in the direction he’s looking. A small school of fish (swimming back toward the center), an ominous light, etc. it doesn’t have to give away the surprise of the prey.

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      • chrisaakins
        chrisaakins @alicia last edited by

        @alicia that is a good point. I will see if I can do that. Can you merge just three layers on PS?

        Chris Akins
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        • chrisaakins
          chrisaakins last edited by

          Thank you @alicia , @Sara-Hickman @Chip-Valecek and @Jason-Bowen and others who provided feedback.

          Here is the final version I hope. I think I may need to be done, at least for a little while.

          BIG QUESTION: How does it read? What story is it telling?

          Merman WIP 3.jpg

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          • MOO
            MOO SVS OG @chrisaakins last edited by MOO

            @chrisaakins I see him looking anxious, peering over at a shark that is stalking him. The moment before! AAAGGGHHHH! Really nice drawing!

            Marsha Ottum Owen

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            • Johanna Kim
              Johanna Kim SVS OG @chrisaakins last edited by

              @chrisaakins In answer to your questions:
              How does it read? It's easy to read. But I wish I could see the Merman's eye better.
              What story is it telling? Agree with @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen's comment. There's a feeling of lurking danger and suspense with the shark shape and the hiding merman.

              Other thoughts: The merman's style and that of the background are very different. Both styles are great, but together, they compete with each other. Is there a style you prefer?

              One way to blend the styles better would be to take the color palette of the background, and the painterly style, and apply that to your merman. I hope you don't mind that I did a sample drawover to show better what I mean. Doing this means sacrificing your detailed line work, however. On ther other hand, I also think going with the merman's style and applying that to the background could look cool, as well. But that might take more time.forum_drawover.jpg

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              • chrisaakins
                chrisaakins @Johanna Kim last edited by

                @Johanna-Kim I do see what you mean. I was trying to emulate a comic book style. Often they have painted backgrounds and inked foregrounds. I may add some ink to the background since I don't want to lose the line work. to see if that works. As far as the eye goes, I was thinking deep black.

                Thanks for the input!

                Chris Akins
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                • chrisaakins
                  chrisaakins @chrisaakins last edited by

                  @Johanna-Kim Good call! I added just a touch of inking and I think it helps define the space a little more. I also added a sparkle of reflected light and that too increases the angst of the piece. Thanks! What do you think?Merman WIP4.jpg

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                  • chrisaakins
                    chrisaakins last edited by

                    Well, I thought it looked better. Now I am having second thoughts. The lines look like an afterthought. Argh. I may need to just come back to this...

                    Chris Akins
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                    • Johanna Kim
                      Johanna Kim SVS OG @chrisaakins last edited by

                      @chrisaakins Yes, I think that if you're going to go with the line work style, you'll need to develop the background more intentionally in that style. I can empathize as this has happened to me before and it took a lot of work, time and experimentation to resolve.

                      It might help to take a small section of your illustration that includes the merman and the background and experiment on that. For inspiration, you could also Google underwater comic book/graphic novel images and see how the line work is treated there. Here's one from DC Comics that shows how the line work in the background is defined, though simpler than in the figures, and the line is a color lighter than black. Also the overall color of the background is more subdued and more monotone.
                      Screen Shot 2019-05-06 at 1.21.18 PM.png

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                      • chrisaakins
                        chrisaakins @Johanna Kim last edited by

                        @Johanna-Kim Yeah I was thinking the black ink looked too much. I think the color is otherwise okay. I have looked at pix of Kelp forests before and it seems okay to me but I will play around with it. Thanks for your help.

                        Chris Akins
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                        • chrisaakins
                          chrisaakins last edited by

                          @Johanna-Kim And now that I have the other pic you posted, mine looks especially messy on the line work. I was going for a more Karl Kopinski look. 4f80ecf7-4c24-4657-bacb-d4b3e9f31e27-image.png Picture credit: Karl Kopinski

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                          • chrisaakins
                            chrisaakins last edited by

                            Okay. I tool all your suggestions and made some subtle changes to the line work. I think I am happy with it. So how about some affirmation? Woohoo!Haha! It has been a great learning process. Thank you everyone who has helped me!
                            Merman WIP 5.jpg
                            BTW I am a complete newbie to Photoshop and in this process, I have learned:

                            • how to mask,

                            • how to convert my ink drawing into a masked layer so I can color under it.

                            • I have learned how to transpose and move objects.

                            • I have experimented with a variety of paintbrushes.

                            • And I have learned what to do when I accidentally delete a layer.

                            • I have learned how to change the opacity of layers and also how to change the light on them.
                              Whew!!!

                            Chris Akins
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                            • Johanna Kim
                              Johanna Kim SVS OG @chrisaakins last edited by

                              @chrisaakins I like your solution a lot! The merman feels much more integrated into his space. Sending you a high five:)

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                              • alicia
                                alicia @chrisaakins last edited by

                                @chrisaakins- Sorry I’m so late getting back on here. Did you figure out the layer merging? The new image looks great! It really has a sense of foreboding & it feels like he’s fleeing whatever the shadow is.

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                                • chrisaakins
                                  chrisaakins @alicia last edited by

                                  @alicia haha. No worries. I figured something out. Thanks for the affirmation!

                                  Chris Akins
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                                    A Former User last edited by

                                    This is a great thread and really cool to see your progress.
                                    I think the sea creature in the background could be a lot clearer and maybe feature or two highlighted on it - maybe an eye peering around the seaweed, or maybe it could be slightly bigger? Great work!!!

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                                    • chrisaakins
                                      chrisaakins @Guest last edited by

                                      @lovetherobot Thanks for the input. I was going for ominous shadow rather than detail. It is murky water and all.

                                      Chris Akins
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