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    APRIL CONTEST VIDEO CRITIQUES!

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    • Laurasketches
      Laurasketches last edited by Laurasketches

      @Lee-White Get yourself some coffee! (or maybe lemon tea with honey for the throat!) Thank you for all this work reviewing everyone's submission. Very helpful to hear over and over again what is needing to tell a story. Thanks so much for the time you spent.

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      • JDRpictures
        JDRpictures last edited by

        @Lee-White holy bajeezus I am not only blown away by the thoroughness and depth of your critique but also by the breadth of your critique to all of us!!!!! The value you guys add to SVS continues to increase. This is one of my favorite communities I’ve ever been a part of.

        And on the storytelling aspect of your critique, my friends just told me similar feedback and they’re not even in the industry! Things lined up pretty well in this and I am seeking to understand the story behind my art. Cheers and thank you

        Jason D Rod
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        • MissMushy
          MissMushy SVS OG last edited by

          @Lee-White thanks so much for doing this marathon crit! Even though I am too chicken to participate myself 😐, I learnt so much from your comments on everyone’s images. Good work everybody! Standard is so high!!

          www.instagram.com/artbymmartinez
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          • KathrynAdebayo
            KathrynAdebayo last edited by

            @Lee-White Wow, this is an unexpected and awesome gift! Thank you for taking the time for this. I was struggling with making my crazy-contraption image more readable, and your suggestions are very helpful. I find your commitment to assisting other artists inspiring and beautiful!

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            • marek.halko
              marek.halko last edited by

              Hey Lee, thanks a lot for a great critique video for all the entries. Wishing a fast recovery to your vocal cords🙂!

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              • Maureen
                Maureen SVS OG @Lee White last edited by

                Thank you, @Lee-White I really appreciate all of these helpful video critiques and, of course, especially mine. So many good things to think about when watching them all. You are so NICE for doing this. I plan to start work on redrawing my dinosaurs to get that 3/4 view. @Maureen-BF

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                • JerrySketchyArt
                  JerrySketchyArt last edited by

                  Added in @Lee-White's suggestions along with a few other changes I though would help tell the story a bit better. Thanks again for doing this for everyone Lee!

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                  • braden H
                    braden H last edited by

                    @Lee-White I'll take no major changes 😃 You really showed us how dedicated you are by doing all of these critiques. Thank you!

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                    • Coreyartus
                      Coreyartus Moderator last edited by

                      Seriously, @Lee-white, WOW. Sheer gold. Thank-you.

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                        suenaumi last edited by

                        Unbelievable! Being new to this, I wasn't expecting ANY feedback at all, so this is truly a gift. Thank you Lee!

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                        • Pilonya
                          Pilonya last edited by

                          WOW, @Lee-White this is amazing! Thank you so much for the feedback, not only mine, but for all the entries! I can’t appreciate it enough!

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                          • Coley
                            Coley last edited by

                            so far have gotten through the first two videos, loving it! Learning so much. this is awesome. 🙂

                            https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                            • theprairiefox
                              theprairiefox last edited by

                              @Lee-White thanks for doing this. They were great.

                              It is funny my wife listens to them over my shoulder (she is not an artist) and after having the last class with you she was like "It is good to hear him again. It is like I know him now." So at the very least you make an impression.

                              -The Prairie Fox
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                              • Eli
                                Eli last edited by

                                On the old west one in the 3rd video, I thought the guy with the gun was getting ready to shoot the rope. That's why the guy about to be hanged doesn't look too worried...? Like in "The Good, the Bad and the Ugly." ?

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                                • Susan Marks
                                  Susan Marks @Lee White last edited by

                                  @Lee-White This is the best gift yet. I am learning so much by listening to your feedback as you review a piece. And you do it so professionally and kind and direct-all in one.

                                  For "a six year old in a middle aged body"-thumbs up.

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                                  • KathrynAdebayo
                                    KathrynAdebayo last edited by

                                    Here’s a bit of an update with the red ball moved so that it’s in front of the blanket. It seems to me more noticeable now, though I’d love anyone’s feedback. Thanks again, Lee.

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                                    • bnewman
                                      bnewman last edited by

                                      @Lee-White Thanks very much for the feedback! I really like your advice on how to load the moment even more -- I wish I'd thought of that! Now I have to admit I was dreading the moment before watching your critique of my work. I've been trying to illustrate without line which has been a bit of a struggle to say the least and I thought my finished piece lost something between sketch and final (and was generally poor overall). Thanks for all your critiques, these are so incredibly valuable.

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                                      • ArtofAleksey
                                        ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                        @Lee-White ok I made the changes. I think I’m actually going to submit this to this months SCBWI “alone” prompt.
                                        Thank you again.
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                                        instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                                        alekseyillustration.com

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                                        • justjax
                                          justjax last edited by

                                          @Lee-White Thanks so much for doing this. I have learnt loads listening to all the other critiques, not just mine. And I'm pleased you suggested leaving out the dog under the plant from mine - I added him at the last minute as I felt something was missing. Adding other subtle characters above and in the background, as you suggested, would help fill that 'missing' feeling. Thank you!

                                          https://www.instagram.com/jacquimulvagh/

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                                          • Lee White
                                            Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                            @Aleksey If teeth are the weapon, then you need to lean into them a little more. Looking good though!

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                                            SVS Faculty Instructor
                                            www.leewhiteillustration.com

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