Making Narrative pieces- Tortoise and the Hare project

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

Hi, everyone! I hope everyone is doing well. Here’s another update on my illustration. I need your help. Do you think I’m over rendering this piece? Do you think I’m adding too much characters? I’m planning to add more animals on the left side behind Hare. I’m afraid that the scene would get too crowded. I feel like it might work but I I also feel like it won’t. I don’t know what to do at the moment. I would truly appreciate your opinions. Thank you so much!

[braden H]

@nyrrylcadiz Looks great so far! However, I can see why you're worried and where you're coming from.

My instant read on the image was that the cheerleader bunny with the pom-poms was super tiny and dancing on the rabbit's engine.

Maybe (maybe?) if you bump up the contrast on the rabbit's spaceship it may help to solve the problem. Maybe. I could well be wrong.

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@Braden-Hallett thanks! I really didn’t notice that bunny making a tangent with the ship. Huge thanks for that. I’ll try bumping up the contrast too

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

Here’s another Update. Any feedback is highly appreciated.

[KathrynAdebayo]

Oh my goodness! I just noticed that the hare has a carrot-mobile! So good!

To address your question, I think the open space as you have it now gives good breathing room, and it already seems like you have a large enough crowd. That's my impression, anyway.

Such a cool piece. It's out of this world!

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@KathrynAdebayo thanks! Yes it is a carrot mobile

[StudioLooong]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz I love your progress on this piece! The characters and ships are so much fun and I think the crowd adds some fun story elements that help keep you in the picture longer. I love the little she-tortoise's expression and the mouse on the balloon way in the back. The crowd between the two ships does start to compete with them a bit maybe you could make them just a tiny bit darker? Also, I noticed that there's a purple line going through the tortoise's neck that looks like it shouldn't be there.

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@StudioLooong thanks! I’ll work on that

[Erin.Cortese]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz Wow, your colours are incredible. This piece has such a nice feel.

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@Erin-Cortese Thanks!

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

Here’s a new update! I’m still going to add more characters on the left side. I feel like it’s really coming together. I’m starting to feel good about it. Any comments? They’re highly appreciated. Thanks!

[animatosoor]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz I think this looks really good. The only thing I can think of is whether you were intending for the glass covers on the spaceships to have slightly soft edges? The feet of the spacecraft have hard edges, and I am wondering if the glass bits should as well. Lovely piece with lots of movement!

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@animatosoor huh, I’ve never really thought about that. The glass and the feet are of different materials tho so I don’t think that they need to act the same. Also glass is more reflective thus creating that hazy/blurry look I guess. Thanks for the suggestion. I’ll try it out.

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

Here’s what I’ve got so far. I don’t like it. I need your help guys.

[Darian]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz I think you need to reduce the intensity of the shadows of the vehicles & flatten the detailing of the crowd in the background..its getting a lot of attention. I'd also reduce the opacity of the glass of the vehicles & make them more transparent, the transparency of the glass would differ between the two vehicles because of the space between them & would add depth to the scene. Looking good otherwise.

What do you not like about it ?

[Darian]

some references for glass:

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

Hi, everyone. Sorry I’ve been away for a while. I’ve busy lately. Anyway, i’ve been working on my Tortoise and Hare illustration and this is what I’ve done.

I finally know why I don’t like the second illustration. It was because of the crowd.I’m just not good with crowds. I wish I could just remove them and put some cool space background but I’ve already established my story. I guess you just can’t win them all, can you? Finish not perfect, right?

Anyway, the fourth piece is in the works. I’ll update you guys soon.

[MichaelaH]

Ha ha this is funny, hare is chilling...love the floating minibar.

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

Hi, everyone! I’m finally calling this piece finished. I’m so happy I can take this off my mind. I think I’ll stop here. I don’t think I can finish the 4th illustration. That’s alright though. 3 out of 4 is not bad. I hope you like this one. Thanks!

[Zachary Drenski]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz I've only been here a week, so I'm seeing all these for the first time. I just wanted to say that I really like these pieces.