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    Tom Shannon's WIP: WHEN SUMMER VACATION GOES WRONG.

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    • chrisaakins
      chrisaakins last edited by

      @Tom-Shannon Hahahaha! I LOVE the first one. It is so funny. I wonder if you could emphasize the smoking charredness of it even more. The lady's expression is priceless. Too much sun. Probably a redhead like my wife,

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      • MichaelaH
        MichaelaH last edited by MichaelaH

        Hmm I think in the first there is invisible man taking sun bath beside this women? Second...some clouds forming a body and making shadows? But mabye I don't understand the story. I like the first better

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          A Former User @chrisaakins last edited by

          @chrisaakins Thanks for the feedback/kind words Chris! Good advice. I agree, there needs to be smoke involved.

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            A Former User last edited by

            Awesome feedback, thank you Michael. The second idea is about a flying dragon, or monster, zooming over its soon to be pray. The idea is a little fuzzy, now I look at it more. This is the wonderful thing about doing rough thumbnails!

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            • animatosoor
              animatosoor last edited by

              @Tom-Shannon Both your ideas are really fun, but I really like the first one more! It's such a funny concept. I read it as a person being burnt in their seat from all the sunbathing. I love it. 😄

              @chrisaakins' idea to add smoke sounds great.

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                A Former User @animatosoor last edited by

                @animatosoor Thank you for the feedback and kind words!

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                • Brad Newman
                  Brad Newman last edited by

                  These are fun! I like the simplicity of all of these. The first one looks like it could easily be in The New Yorker. I think for the second one you need someone looking/pointing up in terror or a dog chasing it or something... maybe the shadow shows a person clutched in it's claws. For the third one, it might be cool to frame it with a photo style frame/border (polaroid?) to drive home the idea that they are posing for a photo. They are posing, right? Might be fun to do a sequence here. Either way, this is a great "moment before" image. The image here is crystal clear and I love the dog's expression.

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                  • lmrush
                    lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

                    All great ideas!

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                    • Jon Anderson
                      Jon Anderson SVS OG last edited by

                      I like the 2nd but I love the first and third! I agree with others remarks on the first and I wish there was a faster way to read the third as a family photo pic being taken. It feels to me like it's already in the album and maybe that's what you wanted. Still, I love the idea!

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                      • juliekitzes
                        juliekitzes last edited by

                        I'm a fan of the first one. It's simple and funny. Maybe a little smoke or something could exemplify what's going on.

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                        • MOO
                          MOO SVS OG last edited by

                          I actually like the concept of number 3. It may get be more interesting if it wasn't straight on. The moment before! 😁

                          Marsha Ottum Owen

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                            A Former User @Brad Newman last edited by

                            @Brad-Newman Thanks Brad. I agree with your comments. #3 is a posing photo, for sure. I thought of the frame/border photo idea too. Maybe a black and white photo so I can capture those really cool old school photo edge shapes? A person clutched in the claws of concept #2 is a great idea. Maybe the monster's nose, part of its head could be visible too? I'm glad you're seeing the general ideas. I appreciate your feedback!

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                              A Former User @lmrush last edited by

                              @lmrush Thanks Lisa!

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                              • sarahlawrence
                                sarahlawrence last edited by

                                @Tom-Shannon 333333333333

                                Omg so much 3! I love the dogs mistrustful gaze 😂 maybe even have the tentacle reaching to grab the dads shoulder

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                                • MOO
                                  MOO SVS OG last edited by

                                  @Tom-Shannon said in Tom Shannon's WIP: WHEN SUMMER VACATION GOES WRONG.:

                                  3 and 4 are good. I love the dog in number three. Well, 3 is still my favorite.

                                  Marsha Ottum Owen

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                                  • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Guest last edited by

                                    @Tom-Shannon i personally like 1 because I’ve never seen an illustration like it possibly before. The other three are great but 1 stands out because of its uniquenes. Great job

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                                      A Former User last edited by

                                      @Nyrryl-Cadiz @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen @sarahlawrence Thank you everyone for the awesome feedback. Feels like #3 and #1 are about 50/50. It's always interesting and educational sharing artwork. I'll do my best to return the favor!

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