Superstition WIP
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I like the blue one and the middle one myself. They could work really well.
As for other things... I hope this isn't stepping on your toes, but you could push those poses a little more perhaps? Maybe have the lightning just offset from Red, because it could be considered a follow-on from actual moment of strike. I love the electricity around her, just pull that lightning strike up a bit.
Also, you can really try and push her pose and facial expression... lightning strikes are part of nature, nature is powerful, so you could try and show that as much as you can in the subject that's being hit. I don't think there's such a thing as just a "little zap" when it comes from the sky!
You can make things more interesting by offsetting limbs so that they're not all going in similar directions. In animation this is called "twinning" and can make the pose feel flat.
How long has it been since Mr. Wolf ate? Is he ravenous? Is he just peckish? Honestly if my dinner was served to me in this fashion, my attitude would be something a bit stronger than what looks like victorious success. I would say it's closer to "utter delight" at the gift from the gods personally
Again push his pose too, even my example can be pushed further. Perhaps he's leaning towards Red for even more emphasis.
Here is my attempt to illustrate what I mean.
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@Chip-Valecek LOL!
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@Amanda-Jean great feedback! I see what you are saying with it.
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@Nyrryl-Cadiz It might not even be real, but at least it is giving me a good superstition to work with LOL
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Moving along, here are the local color and first pass on shadows and highlights.
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Here is a couple more steps. I have a few things to add still and clean up. I hope to finish this weekend. Please let me know if you see anything that needs to be tweaked.
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Looking great, but do you think the lines around wolf's stomach is a bit naff... maybe too much visual exposition? I personally think it's better without them, but your choice. His expression is great
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@Amanda-Jean I am torn about the lines, also around little red, should I remove those? Is it to much? I wanted to show some sort of action with it.
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@Chip-Valecek could you have the wolf’s leg up as if ready to lunge forward and his body leaning a bit backward in oppositional motion?
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@Chip-Valecek I thought the ones around Red were fine, although I might play with shape/colour of them. If it's movement you're trying to emphasise (that is reacting to several thousand volts travelling through her bones), try following the contours of her silhouette as opposed to the electricity maybe?!
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Here is my final pass and with text. What do you think about the text? How about the treatment of the text?
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or this one without the purple lines of shock
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@Chip-Valecek You have a typo “lighting” where I assume you meant lightening. It looks great though.
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@Chip-Valecek I like the one without lines of shock
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@BichonBistro i agree, i like it better without.
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I kinda wanna see her teeth. For some reason seeing skeleton bits like ribs and eye sockets but no teeth is unnerving to me
Wolf's not even gonna have to cook her :smiling_face_with_open_mouth_closed_eyes:
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@Chip-Valecek the second one is what I'd go with. Not so sure about the font choice myself, but I guess I'm a bit of a traditionalist and would choose a simple serif font. I also feel it's a bit too close to the edge of the frame. You have more space down in the bottom right. What do you think about getting the reader to view the picture then read the text instead of vice versa? Or even breaking the sentences up? One top left, one bottom right.
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I like the second one, too, and I also like the idea of breaking the sentences up. I like that you can see the texture more without the shock lines and I personally think the texture is more visually interesting. Nice work!
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Thank you everyone for the feed back. I updated the text and added some eyes into the tree. I meant to do that before but forgot.
