Urgent feedback on thumbnail

[ArtofAleksey]

I would prefer to see an overhead shot of the mummy looking down at the people running away. The mummy looks small and far so it doesnt feel intimidating and since everyone else is already ready running it comes off safe and cute. Which is fine if thats what you want.

If you dont wanna change the angle, make the hat fly off as they are running out of there!

[peteolczyk]

@NessIllustration thanks Ness Can’t wait to see your finished piece

[NessIllustration]

@Aleksey That's a great angle idea and would be a lot more scary, but you hit the nail on the head with me wanting something more safe and cute! I cannot image my style working with anything scary (lol) so I'm going for a children's book style safe retelling of the story with a more fun and cute feel. The idea of the hat flying off is so fun and I LOVE that, thank you for the suggestion friend!!

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@NessIllustration i think your work looks pretty solid!

[ArtofAleksey]

@NessIllustration keep at it! Glad something I said was helpful!

[Zachary Drenski]

Everyone else had great feedback so I'm just going to add a bit to that. My first thought was kind of along the lines as @Aleksey with it looking rather safe for a chase scene. If you are okay with wonky perspective, you could try playing, exaggerating, and pushing the perspective to create dynamism and a sense of shakiness and unease. You could also try falling rocks to go with the perspective stuff to indicate danger. You do great work, and this sketch looks awesome already, so go with what you like/have time for.

[NessIllustration]

@Zachary-Drenski Ouuhhh I like the fallen rocks idea! It could be like those booby trapped, self-destructing chambers! That would be wicked cool! Thanks for the idea Zachary

[NessIllustration]

@Aleksey @Nyrryl-Cadiz @peteolczyk @Perrij @Zachary-Drenski Thank you so much again for your feedback! Here is my sketch.. What do you think?

[peteolczyk]

@NessIllustration I think that’s great Ness

[ArtofAleksey]

@NessIllustration the middle guys leg or arm positions should be reversed (opposite arm/leg) and make the hat flying still but closer to the guys head so it still feels like his hat and not a random hat flying off of someone.

[NessIllustration]

@Aleksey Great advice for the hat! For the limbs though, are you sure? He's bringing up his right leg now so he's in the middle position - where his arms should be in the middle as well. His right arm is currently moving back, opposite the right leg, and the left arm is holding on to the bag so staying relatively put. This seems right to me, but I may be wrong cause sometimes I mix it up with these running positions

[ArtofAleksey]

@NessIllustration if you take his bent leg and bring it forward instead of back it will look better. Try it! It’s a minor thing though i dont think it matters because hes clearly running and some people run differently from others maybe i run weird...

[NessIllustration]

@Aleksey Do you mean like this?

[ArtofAleksey]

@NessIllustration i cannot tell the difference

[NessIllustration]

@Aleksey Oh.. Then probably not what you mean ^^''' I brought the right leg forward, closet to the other leg..

[NessIllustration]

Okay the sketch is due Monday (pretty much now-ish) so I think I'll hand it in like this and try more poses for Indiana Jones later at the color stage. If I rush this to get the pose right tonight I'll mess it up, I'm sure!

[MichaelaH]

@NessIllustration It is really great, what I would change, maybe some connection with the team and the mummy, like one of them has his pupils looking back (man or the cat)...

[Zachary Drenski]

This looks really awesome! I think @Aleksey meant put that back leg forward so that it is in a similar position as the girl's. I see what he is saying but, in my opinion, the man's running position is fine and even better that the girl and him are not striking the same pose.

@MichaelaH mentioned having the eyes of the cat or the man looking toward the mummy. That could be a nice touch. If you decide to do that I think you should have the man looking back because if you have the cat looking back, it will appear to be looking up at the man.

The mummy looks so good, I love how cute it is, so I feel bad even bringing it up, but (to me) the mummy's body and leg don't look like they are connected. Overall, this is looking great and I can't wait to see how it turns out.

[NessIllustration]

@Zachary-Drenski Thank you Zachary for your helpful suggestions I have to agree with you about the mummy's foot, it looks disembodied.. I'll probably remove it entirely! The eyes suggestion is also great and as for the running, I'll see if I can improve it but like you, I don't wish to have the running poses mirror each other and really want them to be different for more variety and dynamism.

[Elinore Eaton]

What a fun illustration! @NessIllustration I'd love to see the running characters be a bit larger and closer to the audience, maybe have the cat the closest. It will create a stronger dominance structure, as well as bring some stronger layering and perspective. If you make them larger and shift them just slightly so that they overlap the stairs a bit, you're also going to lead the eye from the mummy to them and back again, and the composition won't be divided by that strong line illustrating the corner of the room. I did a quick re-size to show you what I mean. Nice work!