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[NessIllustration]

@Zachary-Drenski Ouuhhh I like the fallen rocks idea! It could be like those booby trapped, self-destructing chambers! That would be wicked cool! Thanks for the idea Zachary

[NessIllustration]

@Aleksey @Nyrryl-Cadiz @peteolczyk @Perrij @Zachary-Drenski Thank you so much again for your feedback! Here is my sketch.. What do you think?

[peteolczyk]

@NessIllustration I think that’s great Ness

[ArtofAleksey]

@NessIllustration the middle guys leg or arm positions should be reversed (opposite arm/leg) and make the hat flying still but closer to the guys head so it still feels like his hat and not a random hat flying off of someone.

[NessIllustration]

@Aleksey Great advice for the hat! For the limbs though, are you sure? He's bringing up his right leg now so he's in the middle position - where his arms should be in the middle as well. His right arm is currently moving back, opposite the right leg, and the left arm is holding on to the bag so staying relatively put. This seems right to me, but I may be wrong cause sometimes I mix it up with these running positions

[ArtofAleksey]

@NessIllustration if you take his bent leg and bring it forward instead of back it will look better. Try it! It’s a minor thing though i dont think it matters because hes clearly running and some people run differently from others maybe i run weird...

[NessIllustration]

@Aleksey Do you mean like this?

[ArtofAleksey]

@NessIllustration i cannot tell the difference

[NessIllustration]

@Aleksey Oh.. Then probably not what you mean ^^''' I brought the right leg forward, closet to the other leg..

[NessIllustration]

Okay the sketch is due Monday (pretty much now-ish) so I think I'll hand it in like this and try more poses for Indiana Jones later at the color stage. If I rush this to get the pose right tonight I'll mess it up, I'm sure!

[MichaelaH]

@NessIllustration It is really great, what I would change, maybe some connection with the team and the mummy, like one of them has his pupils looking back (man or the cat)...

[Zachary Drenski]

This looks really awesome! I think @Aleksey meant put that back leg forward so that it is in a similar position as the girl's. I see what he is saying but, in my opinion, the man's running position is fine and even better that the girl and him are not striking the same pose.

@MichaelaH mentioned having the eyes of the cat or the man looking toward the mummy. That could be a nice touch. If you decide to do that I think you should have the man looking back because if you have the cat looking back, it will appear to be looking up at the man.

The mummy looks so good, I love how cute it is, so I feel bad even bringing it up, but (to me) the mummy's body and leg don't look like they are connected. Overall, this is looking great and I can't wait to see how it turns out.

[NessIllustration]

@Zachary-Drenski Thank you Zachary for your helpful suggestions I have to agree with you about the mummy's foot, it looks disembodied.. I'll probably remove it entirely! The eyes suggestion is also great and as for the running, I'll see if I can improve it but like you, I don't wish to have the running poses mirror each other and really want them to be different for more variety and dynamism.

[Elinore Eaton]

What a fun illustration! @NessIllustration I'd love to see the running characters be a bit larger and closer to the audience, maybe have the cat the closest. It will create a stronger dominance structure, as well as bring some stronger layering and perspective. If you make them larger and shift them just slightly so that they overlap the stairs a bit, you're also going to lead the eye from the mummy to them and back again, and the composition won't be divided by that strong line illustrating the corner of the room. I did a quick re-size to show you what I mean. Nice work!

[NessIllustration]

@Elinore-Eaton Elinore, this looks wonderful!! Thank you so much for this!!

[Elinore Eaton]

@NessIllustration Yay! So glad, anytime. I'm kind of a composition junky.
Looking forward to seeing how this goes!

[Perrij]

Not sure if anyone else mentioned this yet, but the perspective on big columns the is off. They should be pointing straight up and down. Of course, it could be an artistic choice to skew the perspective, but in this case I feel its more distracting than anything. I did a quick draw over to show you what i mean

and I added a third column because the wall behind the mummy was feelin kinda empty.

[NessIllustration]

@Perrij That's very accurate critique, but in this case I've decided to add a 3rd vanishing point and tilt the scene as well to create more dynamism in the composition

[Perrij]

@NessIllustration for sure! well in that case, i think maybe tilting the vertical lines of bricks towards the 3rd vanishing point will help sell it

[NessIllustration]

@Perrij They are, hun. Look at them with a ruler, the brick lines on the right of the screen tilt towards the left, the brick lines on the left tilt towards the right. They all "seem" vertical because they're following the established perspective