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    • xin li
      xin li @Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

      @Laurel-Aylesworth thank you. I thought it helps to have the boy's cloth with a distinct pattern, as he is the character that appears in every page, and also on the cover. This was the editor's wish - have a character that the little readers can follow throughout the book, even though there is no story plot (it is a collection of classical songs and rhythms)

      I actually tried to make him look more gender-neutral. But it seems that everyone thinks he is a boy anyway. I guess maybe it is the hairstyle.

      Web: www.lixin.no
      IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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      • xin li
        xin li last edited by xin li

        I am finalizing the Twinkle Twinkle, little star spread.
        I have not finished the character and the bed, only put in the flat color to show the value.

        I am wondering: Does the landscape work? or is it too busy for this scene?

        Currently, I completed 8 spreads, still 6 to go. Based on how much time used for the 8 spreads, I have just enough time to reach the deadline. It is a bit scary. I just hope no one gets flu before the book due day. I have lost so many days during December because of that.

        Web: www.lixin.no
        IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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        • xin li
          xin li last edited by xin li

          I am a bit blind towards this spread. I think I call it done for now, and maybe revisit it a couple of days from now. Any thoughts? (keywords: "magical" and "hopeful")

          Web: www.lixin.no
          IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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          • KaraDaniel
            KaraDaniel @xin li last edited by

            @xin-li I think it's wonderful and conveys your keywords!

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            • Chip Valecek
              Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @xin li last edited by

              @xin-li stunning piece! I think you nailed both the keywords.


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              • NicolaSchofield
                NicolaSchofield @xin li last edited by NicolaSchofield

                @xin-li definitely magical and very beautiful. It is a joy to look at. Well done and good luck with the deadline on the rest!

                Nicola Schofield

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                • Kali
                  Kali @xin li last edited by

                  @xin-li Xin, this is a beautiful spread! I think you have a really nice balance in contrast and your color palette is really intelligently designed. This is the sort of piece you can get lost in, really great work.

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                  • xin li
                    xin li last edited by

                    Thank yo guys. I will just keep painting :smiling_face_with_open_mouth:

                    Web: www.lixin.no
                    IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                    • LauraA
                      LauraA SVS OG last edited by

                      Hi @xin-li! I took your piece into Photoshop to look at it in black and white, and if it were mine I'd take down the value of the snow just a little so that the focus is more on the sky. I know it's counterintuitive because snow is so brilliant, but it keeps the overall composition (clouds vs. scene) cleaner. The trees in front are almost as light as the surrounding clouds. Or anyway, you could try a quick value adjustment mask and see what you think. (Now I've remembered that it's traditional watercolor! But you could still do it afterwards in Photoshop, right?) I like the house and the deer! And I have always like the constellations.

                      And I love the little mouse playing the bass in the previous spread! Don't know whether you feel like changing it now because truthfully not many people would even notice, but the violin mom in me notes that he's playing a little high up on the fingerboard. The bow should be closer to the bridge (to produce sound) and his hand should be near the far end of the bow (see below). Of course, it's just to give you an idea. Your mouse is much more festive than the photo below and fits the spirit of the book much better!

                      images-9.jpeg

                      Overall, great work that fits the spirit of the subject matter well, and it's so lovely to see you doing a whole published book! Yay!!!

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                      • xin li
                        xin li @LauraA last edited by

                        @LauraA thank you so much.
                        I only painted underpainting with watercolor for this piece, to get some nice texture for the piece. Most part of the painting is done in Photoshop, so adjustment on value should not be a problem. I do agree that I need to keep the focus on the constellations, especially for the theme of this poem.

                        I did not know how one plays bass at all. So thank you for pointed out the unrealistic posture :-). Yes. No one has noticed it so far(the mouse playing bass is also on the cover, which has been passed for everyone involved to see). I will see what I can do if I still get a bit of time when I am done with all 14 spreads. I reserved the last couple of days to go through all images one more time.

                        Web: www.lixin.no
                        IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                        • idid
                          idid last edited by

                          lovely pieces! Just one small thing, constellations don't have to be all in same orientation, they can have all different orientation like upside down or 45 degree northeast, etc.

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                          • xin li
                            xin li @idid last edited by

                            @idid thank you for your input. I will fiddle around a bit more with the stars :-).

                            Web: www.lixin.no
                            IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                            • xin li
                              xin li last edited by xin li

                              Two more finished spreads. Any thoughts?
                              [Edit: I removed the images because I do not know if I am allowed to share full spreads before the book is out]

                              • A child in the bathtub, imagining himself on a Viking boat across the Kattegat sea.

                              • Kattegat sea (was mentioned in the poem) is known to be difficult to cross. Using this fact to turn the image into a more active scene, rather than a quite bathing scene.

                              • Keywords: Ready for battle/child-play.

                              • kids with a group of companions traveling to the mill house.

                              • Keywords: Autumn vibe, companionship

                              Web: www.lixin.no
                              IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                              • xin li
                                xin li last edited by

                                Thank you so much for feedback so far. Just a notes: I have deleted some images I shared in the earlier posts. I do not know how much work-in-progress I can share (Nothing was in the contract). SO I took @peteolczyk's advise: remove the images after getting feedback.

                                Web: www.lixin.no
                                IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                                • xin li
                                  xin li last edited by

                                  I just want to check in to say that I am getting down to my final 2 spreads today. All the other 12 finished spreads have been approved. The final art will be turned in on Wednesday. So now I am confident I will make the deadline just on time.

                                  Web: www.lixin.no
                                  IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                                  • peteolczyk
                                    peteolczyk @xin li last edited by

                                    @xin-li that’s great news Xin Li, I can’t wait to see it on the shelves.

                                    www.peteolczykillustrations.com

                                    www.instagram.com/pete_illustrations

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                                    • xin li
                                      xin li last edited by xin li

                                      [Edit: I removed the images because I do not know if I am allowed to share full spreads before the book is out :-)]
                                      I am going to send in my Cover wrap around tomorrow :-). I still need some minor adjustments, but it is very very close to calling it done.

                                      Any final comments on the illustration?
                                      Does the hand lettering typeface work? (It is more or less my first try doing hand lettering, would be very happy if anyone can critique on this)

                                      Laure told me that the posture for playing bass was not quite accurate. But I decide to not work on it due to time pressure to redesign a character. Noted for the next time drawing bass, or cello player 🙂

                                      Web: www.lixin.no
                                      IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                                        A Former User @xin li last edited by

                                        @xin-li This is lovely, congratulations on nearing the completion of so much beautiful work! I really like your lettering, so none of my suggestions are needed but just thought i would share some things: I like that it's purposely irregular, so perhaps if the front foot of the first A were lowered, the two top serifs of the Y were made to be uneven, and if the S had serifs that were more like the serifs on the top of the A and G.

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                                        • xin li
                                          xin li @Guest last edited by

                                          @carolinedrawing Thank you so much for the feedback. You are spot on. I think I will work on your suggestions before handing in the artwork today.

                                          Web: www.lixin.no
                                          IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                                          • xin li
                                            xin li last edited by

                                            Thank you so much for the support along the way. I delivered all the final work today. Everything is confirmed by the editor. So I have done my first book.

                                            Web: www.lixin.no
                                            IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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