January Contest WIP - Fox on Stilts
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I think the rabbit's pose is working better? - more engaged with the tracks- i keep flipping him back and forth but always end up liking him facing away from the fox.(could still change though) I keep taking the shotgun out too...not the most children's book friendly item - (laughably?) I have tried to make it as nonthreatening as possible with the way it is being held. I does seem to fit though? A lot left to do, adding trees, snow, shadows and such. Thank you again for the feedback
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@Kevin-Longueil for what it is worth I like the shotgun! This version reads a bit cleaner and really shows the progression of the fox cunning the rabbit.
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I really like the rabbit's puzzled expression, including the finger at his mouth! And the gun doesn't bother me, especially because it's not a super cutesy illustration. I mean, we have a fox that's going to eat a chicken, it's not like this is a completely violence free story anyway!
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Love the style!
Also like the expressions, not just the puzzled look on the rabbit, but also the look on the fox's face that says "I'm getting away with my scheme!"
The thing I would suggest changing is adding some bushes/trees behind the fox in order to make block the rabbit's view of the fox. I mean, if I were the rabbit and just turned 45º to the right, I would have the answer to what took my chicken right away, and could pick off the pilfering predator in a LoonyTune fashion that would make Elmer Fudd proud. So covering the sight lines might be something to consider.
Otherwise I think it looks great and look forward to seeing the final product! Are you planning on adding more colour, or keeping the cool pallet? -
@nickTabor @LauraA @Josh-Schouwstra-0 Thank you for the quick feedback!- i will leave the shotgun and stop worrying about it. I am glad the expression and pose of the rabbit seem to be working better!
Josh, i totally agree about the trees, i had just taken them out temporarily to sort out the important elements - i should have mentioned that in my post
Thank you all again!
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I really like this and I think the rabbit's expression is a real improvement. My only suggestion is that when you put the trees back in, maybe you could have some of their branches breaking across the middle or do something to join the two halves of the illustration. Marco Bucci talks about looking for the Z in a scene which helps move the eye around the painting. Other than that, I love this and I especially like the style of it.
Laurie DeMott
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@Kevin-Longueil This looks great. I was considering a stilts scenario with a hedgehog - the springy kind! The one thing I would say is that chicken looks like he's about to squawk and give the game away. A chicken gag? I think if he didn't have a shotgun then the fox wouldn't be sneaking away from a rabbit. Farmer rabbits realistically would carry a shotgun.
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@demotlj Thank you for the feedback! - i think you are right and i agree that the trees and shrubs can really help guide the eye through the composition (or not if i do a poor job of it) - I'm really glad to hear that you (and some other folks) are liking the style!
@sigross Than you for the feedback Si! I like your logic on the shotgun - I'm thinking that gagging the chicken might be going a tiny bit too dark - definitely a laugh out loud moment though i look forward to seeing your springing hedgehog! -
I like the style and the expression of the characters. I think the comments about line of sight and using the bushes etc to guide the viewers eye are great points. The only thing I'd suggest is maybe altering the perspective slightly so it's from a higher POV. I'm just thinking the fox is up high on stilts. I also don't have a problem with the shot gun. I can't wait to see this piece develop. Great work!
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@Kevin-Longueil I probably won't do the springing hedgehog as you've nailed the stilts scenario here. I have another idea brewing.
