Nightfall - WIP - Feedback needed :) (new update)
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@nadyart I think @jdubz has some great suggestions. I would also suggest just start playing with the value. I always find myself coming up with solutions while playing around with the value. If you start with 2-4 values to play with and try to keep each attempt within 30-40mins and see how you feel about the image after a couple of attempts.
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Thank you for your comments! It's greatly appreciated :)!
@jdubz I understand your concerns. I've been focused on how the image reads and had consciously chosen to create those two focal points, while the left one would have less value and will therefor not attract that much attention. But since this does not help the piece, I may get back to the thumbnail stage and start over.
@TessaW Thank you for your suggestions, I'll take them into account while redrawing!
@xin-li I'm very unexperienced with this. I definitely will look into this at an earlier stage next time and make it a new learning point going forward. For this piece my goals were to create a more complex composition than the usual ones that I create, plus to have the narrative read better in the image, since my work often lacks good narrative. So I've been focused on working with those two main issues. It's getting a bit too much to focus on everything at once I notice. I think the piece doesn't work well, as I did not factor in the values early on.
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@nadyart I think the difficulty of this piece is that part of the narrative is having a crowd of little stories happening all over one image. So to concept this out early on, some artists don't use much value, but they would need to use groupings. Your other concepts were simpler than this one, so i do kind of think you chose the most challenging one.
There's an SVS class by Will Terry called 50 things, and I think it's a class all its own because it's a challenge to keep a focal point with so many things in the image. It's one of the classes i'll be taking next month or so.
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@nadyart Oh, please don't start over. The idea is awesome. Really minor tweaks I think would make it really shine. What you have going on under the window is fantastic.
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@nadyart sorry to provide feedback so late in the game. I was out of town. I think you don't need to start over. I think once you add values it will come together. A little vignette light on the main character will probably solve most of your issues.
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Sorry I'm also late to the discussion but I agree with those who say you shouldn't start over because the overall feel of the scene is very sweet. I also agree with those who said that adding value might be all it needs to pull it together.
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@carolinedrawing I did indeed choose the most challenging one. But I wanted to and I made it difficult for myself :p. But I needed to get out of my comfort zone. I really like to do the 50 things course as well, after I've finished the composition one!
@jdubz Thank you! I just could not move forward with the sketch because I was too stuck. So I did a remake for that purpose.
@chrisaakins Thank you!
@demotlj Thank you as well
So I did create new thumbnails for the same concept. I chose a new sketch and created a value study. I think it is somewhat better now, but I do find the children's bedroom extremely difficult. There are so many things out of my comfort zone with this piece that I just keep running into my now limitations. Which is good in a way because I need to tackle those. But also very frustrating :P. I think I will move forward to start the final piece, using this sketch. Unless anyone thinks there are very important things to address still.
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@nadyart I really like this, cosy and a bit tense at the same time. I like the balance of light and dark and the position of the focus, it leads my eye around nicely. Maybe make the background quite minimal if you're not sure how you want to handle it - just suggestions of a room
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@nadyart it’s really great to watch your thought process with this image, and I love the most recent value study. For me, having the brother asleep in the background helps the story, and I think it will be possible to add enough detail as you develop the image to keep the character in the background readable , without distracting from the main focal point. I wonder if you could use a secondary light source that is cooler and dimmer in the background to illuminate sleeping character, say moonlight coming in from the window? That might be tricky but it might be fun to try it out
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@nadyart this is great. You hit all the keywords you mentioned for the story. Can not wait to see this being finished
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@nadyart I think this looks wonderful so far! It’s good to tackle things outside of your comfort zone. I look forward to seeing the end product! I really enjoy the lighting and the overall idea
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I also really really like this one
Especially the ghosts/shadows in the foreground make it look magical and give it a really special mood. I'm super excited of how it turns out!
