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    Bongo-bites - June Contest Prompt WIP

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    • Jacy13
      Jacy13 last edited by

      @Aaron_T I like either B or C! I think they both would work well 🙂

      I think it depends on whether Bongo is the focal point, or if Clyde is the focal point in this scene. If we're focusing on the monkey, it might be better to push Clyde deeper into the water like in C. Or vice versa if the focal point is Clyde 😃
      I hope that helps!

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      • TessaW
        TessaW last edited by TessaW

        Wow, @Aaron_T that viewpoint is so cool and it's impressive your mind went here. I'm thinking B or C, with C pulling ahead. I can just feel feel the movement and anticipation of what will happen next, even though the image itself is very still and calm. I wonder if it's too plain? Does it need some leaves or water waves? I'm not sure, maybe it would take away from it's impact, but it's something to consider.

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        • Aaron_T
          Aaron_T last edited by

          Ha ha...sounds like C is the way to go. I'll work on it a bit and muddy the water so it looks like its a river moving and not a still pond. Thank you everyone!

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          • Aaron_T
            Aaron_T last edited by

            For a prompt that seemed lighthearted enough I seemed to make it as dark as possible.

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            • Neha Rawat
              Neha Rawat last edited by

              What an interesting perspective! I liked C as well for the anticipation but agreed it looked a little too clam.
              In your latest render is better with clydes glaring eyes, But I’m just wondering about the relative sizes of bongo and Clyde. Clyde’s head seems huge considering he’s further away under water.

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              • Aaron_T
                Aaron_T @Neha Rawat last edited by

                @Neha-Rawat Yes, I’m struggling with that too. My goal was to make sure clydes mouth was big enough to get the monkey in between his teeth. I may be over thinking it but I don’t want the next scene to be a monkey in thirds 😂

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                • J
                  jdubz last edited by

                  I think side-by-side i liked the original C better than the newer one with the larger mouth. Clyde looks too blurred in my opinion on the new one - the previous one felt like a really good level of obscurity based on where he was located in the image.

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                  • TessaW
                    TessaW last edited by

                    I also liked original C better. The colors were more striking and the viewpoint of the jaws were unexpected in a really good way. Really amps up the anticipation of a "chomp" and displays those sharp teeth nicely. If you're sold on the new pose, then I'd suggest playing with the size like Neha suggested.

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                    • EliaMurrayArt
                      EliaMurrayArt last edited by

                      Im going to throw a curve ball and vote A with adjustments. For me C doesn't make much sense because the croc would be getting a giant mouth full of water. If you watch videos of them jumping out of water they open their mouths quite late in the jump. I also think it does feel too calm. I find A to be the most exciting with the water splashing around and the teeth on full display. But I do think that the values need to be adjusted.

                      I hope you don't mind - but i did a fast paint over where I did an overlay of yellow on top of the monkey and branch, and then did a multiple layer of a light blue over the croc. I think if you played with the values you'd be able to make the image less distracting but equally as impactful.

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                      • Aaron_T
                        Aaron_T @TessaW last edited by

                        @TessaW @jdubz Good point...moving it up in the timeline by just a few seconds like the original C does give it a little more anticipation.

                        Kind of an un-related note, but does anyone else notice how dark Procreate is when you export and then post? I feel like I always have to run it through Photoshop just to lighten it up so I can see it before I post it. The same image as above, just lightened up slightly in Photoshop, where as the one last night was exported and posted without the Photoshop pit stop. Wonder if my settings are out of whack. @EliaMurrayArt I just saw you mentioned the same thing while I was typing! Nice fix...I haven't got in and highlighted the foreground yet but I really like what you did with the yellow!

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                        • baileyvidler
                          baileyvidler @Aaron_T last edited by

                          @Aaron_T said in Bongo-bites - June Contest Prompt WIP:

                          Kind of an un-related note, but does anyone else notice how dark Procreate is when you export and then post? I feel like I always have to run it through Photoshop just to lighten it up so I can see it before I post it.

                          When I notice that happening, I usually first check how bright my screen is. When the screen is too bright, I unconsciously make the image darker to compensate. The brightness of the room can also affect how you see the screen. If that's not it, then it might be a Procreate/ipad thing.

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                          • Aaron_T
                            Aaron_T @baileyvidler last edited by

                            @baileymvidler That's got to be it...I mostly draw in the evenings, and keep my screen blindingly bright. Who needs sunlight anyway?

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