WIP - June Contest - Critiques Welcome!
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@miranda-hoover The alligator is more pushed back under Bongo now. And I prefer this revised angle of Bongo's head. It somehow makes him feel more alive or active.
One small thing: Now that you've shifted his body a bit to the left (his belly button and face), I wonder if it would make sense to shift his dangling leg also to the left (knee facing more left, showing a big more rear end so we can almost see where the tail comes out but not quite).
For the final, will you be taking a photo of the paper-cut illustration, or scanning? If a photo, you might burn a candle or incense and get some "mist" into the image. Or you can certainly add this effect in Photoshop:)
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@Johanna-Kim Thanks for the feedback!
Oh, I didn't think about adjusting the legs too--thanks for mentioning that. I'll try shifting the legs a bit.
I'll be attempting the cut-out effect in Procreate, so the piece will be all digital. It would be really cool to have it physically cut out of paper, but I don't think I'll have the time or resources for that this month. That is a really cool idea, though!
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Loving it - yes, Bong's branch is immediately apparent as a fish hook.
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I love the composition of this piece. Normally, I would avoid of having the main character in the middle of the canvas. But I think for this piece it feels right. My only comments is the value structure. I would try to keep the most contrast on the main subject - in this case, the monkey, if I understood the concept correct. Right now the value of the money is quite light compared to the background. I would try to have much darker value on the money to add more contrast.
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Your composition is really nice. I think you can tweak the monkey's feet just a bit. They look too human. Monkey and ape feet are more like elongated hands with a short opposable thumb that sticks out to the side some.
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@Jane-Smith-0 Thank you
@xin-li I was a bit nervous using this composition, so thank you for your feedback! I'll work on bumping up Bongo's contrast. Thanks!
@Kim-Hunter Thanks! Yeah, I didn't even notice his feet at first, so thanks for pointing it out!
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Wow I live this comp and the chubby little monkey. The one thing that's really bothering me is that the monkey has a human foot. A monkey foot is going to look more like an elongated human hand with the big toe diget positioned higher up on the foot than the other toes and at a slightly different angle (reference attached)
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Almost a the finish line! Still have some cleanup to do, but think I'm past all the major changes.
I decided to change how I was planning to color it and changed Clyde's design--hopefully, he looks much more like an alligator now. I think my family's very tired of me asking "does this look like an alligator?" haha.
@StudioLooong Thanks for the reference pics! I changed his foot to be more monkey-like, but didn't make them quite as long as in the pics. Please let me know if you think they could be pushed a little further. Thanks!
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@miranda-hoover Oh yeah, I think that works really well.
Taylor Woolley
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Oh good! Thanks for the feedback
