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    • TessaW
      TessaW last edited by TessaW

      I think @gavpartridge gave an excellent critique. He hit the points I was thinking as well. It is a really striking image overall, so I think you are on to something @dafoota!

      @Kevin-Longueil I started listening to the audiobook, and was wondering if the silver slippers were going to turn to ruby at some point! It will be interesting to try to catch all the differences. The blue and white gingham dress sounds like it's still a go.

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      • carlianne
        carlianne @frankiiij last edited by

        @dafoota Have you considered making the text white instead of using an outer glow?

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        • frankiiij
          frankiiij @TessaW last edited by

          @TessaW Yes it was spot on...Ive been letting it marinate for a while...It was so wholesome and delicious. Also right to the point. Much Love. ONE!

          Much love and God bless!

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          • frankiiij
            frankiiij last edited by

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            @Kevin-Longueil @gavpartridge @TessaW @carlianne

            Much love and God bless!

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              Jonathon B Baker 0 @frankiiij last edited by

              @dafoota This revision is looking good. I'm glad you toned down the halo around the lettering. I thought that was a bit distracting but it looks good now. I'm wondering if you could put a little of the green glow from the city into the eyeballs. Might make it punch more.

              Jonathon Bee

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              • carlianne
                carlianne @frankiiij last edited by

                @dafoota Oh yeah, that glow is much better, looks more like part of the scene! I think I might still change the text color though, it's getting a bit lost when you squint at it.

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                • TessaW
                  TessaW last edited by TessaW

                  I think it's much improved, but there are 2 issues that give me pause.

                  1. For me the biggest issue is that the text looks like an after thought. The title has very little impact due to a combo of color and size. If you haven't done so- I would make a bunch of small, rough mock ups, playing with the text and with secondary elements . Example:

                  dafoota.png

                  2.The way you've rendered the nose and around the mouth is very interesting- you've made small detailed strokes to divide between the light and shadow, but you haven't used this same method elsewhere. My eye wants to focus right on her nose, despite her eyes being so intense. I'd either carry this kind of rendering elsewhere, or simplify the shadow and light division in nose/mouth area in order to unify the rendering of the cover.

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                  • frankiiij
                    frankiiij @Jonathon B Baker 0 last edited by

                    @Jonathon-B-Baker-0 nothing but gratitude

                    Much love and God bless!

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                    • frankiiij
                      frankiiij @carlianne last edited by

                      @carlianne thank you for your time and patience

                      Much love and God bless!

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                      • frankiiij
                        frankiiij @TessaW last edited by

                        @TessaW Those are awesome. thank you for your time and patience. Thank you for being patient with me responding. I just happen to not even see the notification for when you did comment. Yeah I should have done something with the eye and the lettering. I might have naturally fixed the nose focused in my submission. I really enjoy honest feedback and enjoy reading critiques throughout the forum to learn what i can. Thank you. Much love. ONE!

                        Much love and God bless!

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