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    • aska
      aska last edited by

      Hello, here is my idea. I really wanted to make a comic. What do you think about the draft? I will be grateful for any comments 🙂
      comicA4_dragonfly_s.jpg

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      • Anna Lindsay
        Anna Lindsay last edited by

        Cute character! I especially like how you've drawn the last 3 panels. The main issue that stands out is I can't really follow the story. What's happening in the 6th panel?

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          aprilshin last edited by

          Love the comic idea! I think it would be helpful if you gave us a synopsis of the story you're trying not tell through the comic so we can better understand how to help you! 🙂

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          • aska
            aska last edited by

            Thanks so much for your comments @Annabishop and @aprilshin ! 🙂
            In the first panel, we can see an open book next to the muffin. The 6th pannel is close up on the book, where it is showing a basic characteristic of fly and dragon fly. It shows that fly positives is mainly that it helps to compost, while dragon fly has got many other positives, therefore pluses and minuses... I can see this is not a perfect solution. Any ideas how to improve? 🙂

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            • aska
              aska last edited by

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              • aska
                aska last edited by

                Hi, I have made some changes. I hope its better... 🙂 comicA4_dragonfly_v2.jpg

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                • amlilui
                  amlilui last edited by

                  The clean up really helps! Really cute story 🙂

                  Website: www.amberleighluecke.com
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                  • Anna Lindsay
                    Anna Lindsay @aska last edited by

                    @aska Nice, it reads a lot clearer now! 😊

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