Society of Visual Storytelling

    SVSLearn Forums

    • Register
    • Login
    • Search
    • Recent
    • Tags
    • Popular
    • Users
    • Groups
    • Search

    Portrait help! Why is this so bad?

    Artwork
    10
    20
    856
    Loading More Posts
    • Oldest to Newest
    • Newest to Oldest
    • Most Votes
    Reply
    • Reply as topic
    Log in to reply
    This topic has been deleted. Only users with topic management privileges can see it.
    • carrieannebrown
      carrieannebrown @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

      @Nyrryl-Cadiz very helpful, thank you!

      www.instagram.com/carrieannesdesigns/
      www.carrieannebrown.co.uk

      1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
      • carrieannebrown
        carrieannebrown @Michael Angelo Go last edited by

        @Michael-Angelo-Go @Nyrryl-Cadiz you're right, it's confusing because it's for a specific person and represents a situation that others won't understand. It's my gym class instructor, he's counting down 3 with his fingers. I did one for each of my class instructors but I got caught up in embarrassment and not wanting to offend real people. I think I should remove them from my portfolio and keep them private, I just don't have much work yet ๐Ÿ™ƒ

        www.instagram.com/carrieannesdesigns/
        www.carrieannebrown.co.uk

        Michael Angelo Go 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
        • carrieannebrown
          carrieannebrown @j.sienkowski last edited by

          @j-sienkowski thank you!

          www.instagram.com/carrieannesdesigns/
          www.carrieannebrown.co.uk

          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
          • Michael Angelo Go
            Michael Angelo Go @carrieannebrown last edited by

            @carrieannebrown Perhaps you should've added other people or objects in the background to create more context?

            But if you don't want to work on this anymore for your portfolio, that's completely fine ๐Ÿ™‚

            Finis Coronat Opus
            Instagram: www.instagram.com/madgcartoons/
            Behance: www.behance.net/madgcartoons
            Website: https://michaelangelodgo.wixsite.com/madgcartoons

            1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
            • donnamakesart
              donnamakesart last edited by

              So fun! ๐Ÿค” Could you clarify what you wanted the piece to show? Which one is the most important: the face resemblance, the fact heโ€™s a gym instructor, or that he was counting to 3? :))

              Was it necessary he be in the that pose or could you have chosen a different one that shows all 3 more effectively?

              If you could give a reference picture and clarify your intent maybe We could come up with a better solution. Iโ€™m kind of curious how I would tackle this haha.

              Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/donnamakesart/
              Behance: https://www.behance.net/donnamakesart
              Website: https://donnamakesart.com/

              carrieannebrown 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
              • carrieannebrown
                carrieannebrown @donnamakesart last edited by

                @donnamakesart his instagram handle is @aaronabayomi. At the start of the year I decided to start working towards a career in illustration, I have been doing it as a hobby for years but have kind of lost my style. My goal was to practice portraits of real humans but also do something he wasn't offended by. I'm still trying to figure out my style, I want to get to the point where I know how I draw something so I don't feel like I'm starting from scratch each time. I hope that answered your questions ๐Ÿ™‚

                www.instagram.com/carrieannesdesigns/
                www.carrieannebrown.co.uk

                donnamakesart 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                • donnamakesart
                  donnamakesart @carrieannebrown last edited by donnamakesart

                  @carrieannebrown oh so cool! Heโ€™s using your work as his profile picture haha. As a gift I would say you achieve your goal ๐Ÿ™‚

                  As for effective art practice, itโ€™ll be better to focus on improving in one area per piece (eg. Do a 30 day watercolor portrait challenge or 100 poses challenge). Milage is painful but itโ€™s the best way to learn haha.

                  Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/donnamakesart/
                  Behance: https://www.behance.net/donnamakesart
                  Website: https://donnamakesart.com/

                  1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                  • Jeannelle
                    Jeannelle last edited by

                    I don't think it's that bad. Maybe it was just a difference in taste. I'm not familiar with Charles Lively's work- I tried to google but can't find him. Personally, I find portraits to be difficult to do with a stylized illustration. Maybe one thing you can do is find people who are great at caricatures? They seem able to combine stylized drawings with likeness really well.

                    instagram: https://www.instagram.com/jeannellepita/
                    website: http://jeannellepita.com/

                    carrieannebrown 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                    • ABCre8ive
                      ABCre8ive last edited by

                      The first thing I noticed was the anatomy. It looks odd at places. Agree with comments from @Michael-Angelo-Go

                      Good luck!

                      carrieannebrown 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                      • carrieannebrown
                        carrieannebrown @Jeannelle last edited by

                        @Jeannelle-Pita sorry, it auto-corrected his name, it's Charles Hively. He's not a working illustrator, he runs an illustration magazine called 3x3

                        www.instagram.com/carrieannesdesigns/
                        www.carrieannebrown.co.uk

                        1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                        • carrieannebrown
                          carrieannebrown @ABCre8ive last edited by

                          @ABCre8ive thank you, I'll get there one day (maybe)

                          www.instagram.com/carrieannesdesigns/
                          www.carrieannebrown.co.uk

                          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                          • Alan Rolle
                            Alan Rolle last edited by

                            Hi carrieannbrown! Thanks for sharing your image. I like the direction of your illustration, trying to achieve a dynamic narrative. Respecting your request here are some elements worth looking. First is considering in looking at the anatomy of the legs. You made them considerablly thinner compared to the upper body and the arms which are more well toned. Legs from a design point of view have to have certain level of rubustness to support the rest of the weight of the upper body to attain stability abnd balance, and especially the feet you gave your character are very small, How will your character walk? I think that the neck and the position of the head. While I comprehend you want create the notion that the head is looking up but you made you made the neck very bendy, thin and long like a giraffe. Maybe that could be ressolved by bring the head closer to the body and the neck thicker. These are just suggestions from what I understand. I liike your colour palette. Hope that this helped. Best of luck.

                            1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                            • First post
                              Last post