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    • miranda-hoover
      miranda-hoover last edited by

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      Getting close to the final version ๐Ÿคž Any thoughts at this point?

      Something seems off with the kid's head. A friend suggested the hair might be too big--but is that the cause or a symptom of a wonky face. I keep trying to fix it, but the expression always seems to lose a bit of the charm--which probably means I've been looking at it too long. Is there something I'm missing? Or should I simply try cutting down on the hair fluff?

      (Also, I think this is the most colors I've ever had in a single piece--yay personal growth!)

      https://www.instagram.com/mirananemone

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      • Kevin Longueil
        Kevin Longueil SVS OG @miranda-hoover last edited by Kevin Longueil

        @miranda-hoover this looks awesome! I think what strikes me about the head is the parallel straight lines in the front and back - the tuft of hair in the front seems alone in the way it is stylized - I think rounding the back of the head and opening the curl up and maybe increasing the forehead size ( did I get the forehead idea from just watching one of Nessโ€™s videos?. I think so ๐Ÿ™‚ anyways here is a quick sketch of what i was thinking - great piece as usual

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        • Asyas_illos
          Asyas_illos last edited by

          You did stray from the original a little bit I think if you reduce the top of the hair a smidge it would look a little better but also I noticed you added teeth I think it actually took away from the cuteness you had in the sketch. Itโ€™s still a great image hope that helps you a bit!

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          • Melissa_Bailey
            Melissa_Bailey @miranda-hoover last edited by

            @miranda-hoover looking good! Love your color harmony.

            For me, what feels off with the baby yeti is that its head and shoulders are a different silhouette than the mom yetiโ€™s. The mom yeti was drawn very stylized with smooth lines, no separation between head and shoulders, which works beautifully for the character. But the baby has defined head and shoulder.

            It seems that a juvenile yeti would mimic the same overall shape as its parent, only smaller and rounder and fuzzier/plumper. At least thatโ€™s how I see it.

            Really looking forward to seeing this spot all finished! Two thumbs way up!

            illustrator - author - smiley person
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              Richard Matthews last edited by

              @miranda-hoover Great concept! I really like this image :D.

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              • miranda-hoover
                miranda-hoover last edited by

                @Kevin-Longueil Thanks for the feedback/image; I can defiantly see how the larger forehead makes it look more baby-like. Massive hair seems to be my default for some reason, haha. I'll try to smooth it out and work on increasing the forehead. Thanks again!

                @Asyas_illos I see what you mean ๐Ÿค” I suppose the mouth seemed a bit empty, but maybe I just need to make the tongue a bit larger like in the sketch. Thanks! I'll play with it a bit more.

                @Melissa-Bailey-0 Thanks! Good point; I didn't even think about that! I'll see if I can try to smooth out the transition between head and shoulders a bit.

                @Richard-Matthews Awww! Thank you! ๐Ÿ˜Š

                https://www.instagram.com/mirananemone

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                • Kim Rosenlof
                  Kim Rosenlof last edited by

                  I really like your illustration. It is so funny! Nice color palette too!

                  Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/kiminyrose/

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                  • miranda-hoover
                    miranda-hoover @Kim Rosenlof last edited by

                    @Kim-Rosenlof Thank you! ๐Ÿ˜„ I'm so happy the colors are working out!

                    https://www.instagram.com/mirananemone

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                    • miranda-hoover
                      miranda-hoover last edited by

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                      Ok! Made some adjustment to the kid's head and feeling much better about it. Thanks for your feedback, everyone! Looking at it now, I might get rid of that little Alfalfa spike on the back of the head, though.

                      Any final thoughts?

                      https://www.instagram.com/mirananemone

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                      • hayleyannececil
                        hayleyannececil last edited by

                        I prefer your yeti with the previous hair โ€œ)

                        Either way it is a super sweet idea!

                        https://www.instagram.com/hayleyannececil

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                        • miranda-hoover
                          miranda-hoover @hayleyannececil last edited by

                          @hayleyannececil Thanks! ๐Ÿค” I'll see about playing with it a smidge more, then.

                          https://www.instagram.com/mirananemone

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