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    Narnia part 3--which rough works best?

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    • LauraA
      LauraA SVS OG last edited by

      So, I thought I was ready to move on to drawing this one out, but I realized the perspective didn't work and by the time I had it straightened out, the composition didn't work anymore! Note to self: If you are a person who draws in a somewhat realistic style, work out the perspective issues early!

      I went back and created six new thumbnails, or roughs, or whatever you want to call them. I know which ones I like best right now, but I want to get your opinions. I can make modifications, but want to know which overall POV and composition looks best. I want the White Witch to look intimidating, so that's one factor.

      Thank you in advance for your input!

      P.S. This is actually the first scene in the story chronologically, but it's the third one I started thumbnails on, so that's why it's numbered 3.

      Narnia Edmund meets White Witch new thumbnails.jpg

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      • braden H
        braden H last edited by

        My vote's for #5! Looking up at the witch has the best potential for making her look intimidating.

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        • Kevin Longueil
          Kevin Longueil SVS OG @LauraA last edited by

          @LauraA Five is awesome!!! Maybe scoot front of the sleigh to the right a bit?. i think having the driver out of the gutter a tiny bit more might be cool - i think if the figurehead carving on the sleigh gets cropped a tiny bit it would still work ...these are all really nice!!... but 5 really jumps out to me

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          • miranda-hoover
            miranda-hoover @LauraA last edited by

            @LauraA 5 looks great and is the most intimidating. I also like the composition of 3, but I think it's better to show her from the front. Love her hair, btw!

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            • Valerie Light
              Valerie Light last edited by

              I'm also voting for 5! All beautiful work, but the witch in 5 looks dominating and powerful.

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              • Tiffany Thomas
                Tiffany Thomas last edited by

                These are all pretty fantastic! Purely from a design perspective I LOVE #3, it's such an interesting perspective and it reminds me a bit of Talouse-Lautrec and some of his unique compositions. However, I think the design and perspective in #5 makes the White Witch look the most intimidating. First she is staring straight at the viewer, which is very confrontational and the POV is from a lower angle looking up at her which seems to imply she is above/greater than the viewer (which I'm assuming is the child shown in the other sketches). Love seeing your process here! Looking forward to seeing which you choose to develop.

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                • Larue
                  Larue last edited by

                  3 and 5 get my vote. In three I like that she looks large and imposing physically and emotionally with the boy small and weak. In five I really like the queen but I think the driver is getting too much attention and could be much smaller and slightly hidden by dragon head. Nice work!

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                  • LauraA
                    LauraA SVS OG last edited by LauraA

                    Thanks for your feedback, everyone! Five it is, and I'll work on the driver, dragonhead, gutter, etc.

                    P.S. I am having a lot of fun with that Medusa hair!

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                    • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                      Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @LauraA last edited by

                      @LauraA 26 is my personal favorite but if you want intimidating, I think 5 is the one.

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                      • Katherine
                        Katherine last edited by

                        I'm so glad I thought about it and chose a favourite before reading the comments! My choice is 5 too 😃 You could have a lot of fun with the detail of her garb in 5. She looks super cool and intimidating.

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                        • lenwen
                          lenwen last edited by

                          I love 5 too!!

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                          • LauraA
                            LauraA SVS OG last edited by

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                            • LauraA
                              LauraA SVS OG last edited by

                              So, I moved that dwarf and dragon head all over the place, and finally decided on this size and placement for foreshortening and drama. He's still in the gutter, but at least he's not in a tangent with the dragon head and he could believably peer over it. I printed out the page full-size and folded it, and the gutter doesn't really bother me. What do you guys think?

                              (Obviously, there are still lots of details to work out! But for now just I'm going for placement and overall impression.)

                              IMG_5048.jpg

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                              • Kevin Longueil
                                Kevin Longueil SVS OG @LauraA last edited by

                                @LauraA This looks great to me! I know this is an early sketch and many details are yet to be hammered out but i thought i might mention a thought that popped into my head which is to possibly tilt her head back a tiny bit to reinforce that we are looking up at her?(or more importantly that she is looking down on us) - i know this could be a thing you've already considered or discarded but just wanted to throw it out there - Beautiful line quality as usual!!

                                Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
                                https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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                                • LauraA
                                  LauraA SVS OG @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                                  @Kevin-Longueil Yes, today her head went back and I'm experimenting with facial expressions and different features to see which one gets the idea best. I'll make the dwarf look more like he's pulling the reins up short as well. This is the fun part! 😃

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                                    Mara Price @LauraA last edited by

                                    @LauraA Good choice. I also Like number 5

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