How's this vertical title look?

braden H

@Nathalie-Kranich said in How's this vertical title look?:

That's really cool, I love this new version. Really amazing how the title is incorporated!

That's good! Thank you I think it's gonna turn out at this point (thank goodness, lol)

braden H

I figured i may as well post some WIP as it progresses

carriecopadraws

@Braden-Hallett I love the evolution of this cover! I'd definitely pick up this book off the shelf.

Fay

I would pick up a book with this cover! It has a dark interstellar yet open feel to it with a side of mystery! During the characters silhouette phase, at first I thought the child close to the title had elongated shoes until the line details were drawn in. This is such a small detail and can be dismissed, but at first glance the absence of the heel on his left leg makes the cuff of his pants come across as the heel and in previous versions the heel was present.

braden H

@carriecopadraws said in How's this vertical title look?:

@Braden-Hallett I love the evolution of this cover! I'd definitely pick up this book off the shelf.

Awesome! That's good

@Fay said in How's this vertical title look?:

During the characters silhouette phase, at first I thought the child close to the title had elongated shoes until the line details were drawn in. This is such a small detail and can be dismissed, but at first glance the absence of the heel on his left leg makes the cuff of his pants come across as the heel and in previous versions the heel was present.

So it works better now the details are filled in, yes?

Melissa_Bailey

@Braden-Hallett looking really good!

One cover design suggestion: tilt the “the” to line up with the rest of the title. Offsetting it like that draws too much attention to it.

Nice work, as always!

Fay

@Braden-Hallett Yes and no...I’m having a case of rabbit-duck illusion. I see what you’ve drawn and also see a ballerina leg, the shoe’s tongue looks like the heel...

Will you be adding colour or monochromatic? Will the other shoe have loose shoe laces?

braden H

@Fay Definitely adding colour to the characters. I always leave it til last

Maybe with colour it'll read a bit better, but I can always tone down the tongue a tad!

APHOTICMOTH

@Braden-Hallett The way this has evolved is great. Now it looks like a space adventure, while the first cover it looked to me like a mastermind controlling a kid, and a spooky friend. Like maybe they were mind swapping? Wasn't sure how to interpret it.

I love that one kid is confident, and looking forward to whatever it happening, while the other is struggling a bit.

braden H

@CLCanadyArts said in How's this vertical title look?:

Now it looks like a space adventure, while the first cover it looked to me like a mastermind controlling a kid, and a spooky friend. Like maybe they were mind swapping? Wasn't sure how to interpret it.

Thanks Space adventure is definitely what I'm goin' for! The other cover does definitely make a lot more sense once the reader's halfway through the book, lol.

@CLCanadyArts said in How's this vertical title look?:

I love that one kid is confident, and looking forward to whatever it happening, while the other is struggling a bit.

I imagine that swimming in zero G would be kinda like skating, skiing, or riding a bike. People that can do it make it look easy. People that can't, weeeeeeell no so much

Gaelle Grizzly

@Braden-Hallett Hi Braden. As always, your style and your way of designing things are just awesome. When this book will get printed, I'll definitly buy a copy :).

As for the illustration itself, I had a hard time figuring out where the boys are, in you two last illustration (a spaceship I suppose, but are they in or out?) From my point of view, it was may more readable in the illustration where we could see a part of the spaceship on the left upper corner. But that's just a netpicking point of view, soooo don't take it to seriously.

Love your work!

braden H

@Gaelle-Grizzly said in How's this vertical title look?:

it was may more readable in the illustration where we could see a part of the spaceship on the left upper corner. But that's just a netpicking point of view, soooo don't take it to seriously.

Interesting! Maybe I can have the best of both worlds and have that part of the spaceship there but much darker than it was (so it's there but it doesn't class with the lettering)

Fay

Yes the colour helped with the foot/heel separation for sure!

braden H

@Fay Awesome! Good to know