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    May 2021 Contest WIP Feedback Kindly Requested

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    • Melissa_Bailey
      Melissa_Bailey @Jeremy Ross last edited by

      @Jeremy-Ross I think you made some great changes that really improved the piece.

      Just something to think about: spiders usually have two prominent fangs -- perhaps switching out teeth for fangs would really say "spider"? The white teeth are also competing for attention with the main characters -- is that what you're going for?

      One more thing: when you took out the moon, you changed the light source to the glowing ball. Everything should now be lit differently, as there is no more backlighting from the moon. There especially wouldn't be such a dark shadow underneath the main characters because they are so close to the main light source. If you tone down the brights so that the lightest thing in the illustration shares a space with the main characters, that will really help them stand out.

      Oh, and I don't think you need the crows. Why are they there? What are they adding to the story? For me, they're distracting from the main action.

      Apologies for getting so nitpicky. Really looking forward to seeing where you go from here!

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      • Jeremy Ross
        Jeremy Ross @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

        Hi @Melissa-Bailey-0, thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback.

        I really appreciate your comments, nitpicking is exactly what I need (smile)!

        You definitely provided some excellent points; I’m going in for another round.

        Cheers!

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        • lizardillo
          lizardillo last edited by lizardillo

          This is great. I love the interaction between the two, they look like they are a real partnership and know exactly what their are doing. To add the Melissa’s very well written comment regarding the spider character - if you have look at spiders they also have a strange amount of eyes! Without losing the feel of your piece and it’s stylised look, adding the fangs and extra eyes would make the spider a really fearsome creature 🕷

          I just googled ‘spider eyes’ for ref. Not sure if I should add a photo here or not 😳 (please don’t have nightmares)

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          • Jeremy Ross
            Jeremy Ross @lizardillo last edited by

            Hi @lizardillo, so I re-drew the spider to be more realistic but just wasn’t feeling it, so I decided to stick with my original monster-ish-like spider.

            I adjusted the lighting based on input from @Melissa-Bailey-0. It’s not perfect, but I’m happy with it.

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            • lizardillo
              lizardillo @Jeremy Ross last edited by

              @Jeremy-Ross it looks great. The spiders legs are a lot clearer now the crows have gone so it looks more spider-y by just doing that without the need to add the extra facial features 👍

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              • Georgios Christopoulos
                Georgios Christopoulos @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                @Jeremy-Ross the concept and composition is beautiful! Good Luck with it!!!

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                • Jeremy Ross
                  Jeremy Ross @Georgios Christopoulos last edited by

                  Thank you @Georgios-Christopoulos and @lizardillo!

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                  • Melissa_Bailey
                    Melissa_Bailey @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                    @Jeremy-Ross really nice! The lighting makes SUCH a difference. Great job!

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                    • Jeremy Ross
                      Jeremy Ross @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

                      Thank you so much @Melissa-Bailey-0! I really appreciate you taking your time to offer feedback throughout my revisions.

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                      • TaniaGomesArt
                        TaniaGomesArt @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                        @Jeremy-Ross It looks really great! I'm really at the beginning of my journey, so a lot of times I don't have much feedback to give in terms of improving, but is so interesting to see how these small changes make such a difference!! Good luck for the contest. ☺

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                        • ellenseal_art
                          ellenseal_art last edited by ellenseal_art

                          @Jeremy-Ross So fun! I love how the spider is scary but also somehow adorable? Perfect children's book balance! I'm also obsessed with her little spur earrings that match the ones on her shoes. Such a fun little detail. Best of luck in the contest!

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                          • Jeremy Ross
                            Jeremy Ross @TaniaGomesArt last edited by

                            Thank you for your kind words @TaniaGomesArt! Often times, I complete my piece at the 11th hour and lose the opportunity for feedback from this wonderful community.

                            Feedback is such a wonderful gift!

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                            • Jeremy Ross
                              Jeremy Ross @ellenseal_art last edited by

                              Hi @ellenseal14, thank you for your kind words! I drew a super scary spider as an alternative; however, it just didn’t feel cohesive so I stuck with a furry big-eyed toothy monster spider.

                              Her earrings are pretty cute!

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                              • frankiiij
                                frankiiij last edited by

                                Whoa! This is so amazing!

                                Much love and God bless!

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                                • Jeremy Ross
                                  Jeremy Ross @frankiiij last edited by

                                  Thank you so much @frankiiij! I was very lucky to get some incredible feedback from the group.

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