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    • Asyas_illos
      Asyas_illos @ArtistErin last edited by

      @ArtistErin @PenAndrew thank you ☺️

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      • AngelinaKizz
        AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

        @Asyas_illos I think because of all the white surrounding the falcon, he's become the focal point.

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          Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

          @AngelinaKizz thanks for the feedback maybe if I darken her hair it’ll bring the attention back down to her…?

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            Asyas_illos last edited by

            So here’s a version with darker hair
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            • Melissa_Bailey
              Melissa_Bailey @Asyas_illos last edited by

              @Asyas_illos beautiful job rendering the sandstorm!

              What is your intended focal point?

              For me, the falcon draws attention -- why is he there? What does he add to the story?

              Because you have 4 characters in each of the 4 corners, they're competing for attention. If you intend that the woman be the main character, because she's the smallest, you may need to put her in the darkest colors so that she will stand out. right now the camel and sphynx draw more attention than she does, because of their value, size, and because the sphynx is above the sandstorm.

              That's how I'm seeing it, anyways. Hope this feedback is helpful.

              Again, great piece!

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              • AngelinaKizz
                AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                @Asyas_illos what if you put a bit more tension on the falcon and flipped him to flying against the wind? You would keep the air change feel, have more of a triangle between your characters (minus the pharaoh).

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos last edited by

                  So the falcon is definitely not needed to tell the story I was just thinking it was lacking something I tried one more spot for him but I can remove him altogether if it doesn’t work what do you guys think?
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                  • PenAndrew
                    PenAndrew @Asyas_illos last edited by

                    @Asyas_illos I think if you wanted to keep the falcon which I prefer on the left, but I agree it does draw your eye, as it well done, maybe you could make it a lower value, almost a silhouette and lower it in the sky.

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                    • Asyas_illos
                      Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                      I think the falcon is causing too much trouble LOL so out he goes

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                      • PenAndrew
                        PenAndrew @Asyas_illos last edited by

                        @Asyas_illos The wonderful thing about digital falcons is that they last forever and can return another day! This is one of the values and wonders of Procreate.

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                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos @PenAndrew last edited by

                          @PenAndrew yes he will be back sometime!

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                          • PenAndrew
                            PenAndrew @Asyas_illos last edited by

                            @Asyas_illos Did you see Rabbit road race is the july prompt!

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                            • Asyas_illos
                              Asyas_illos @PenAndrew last edited by

                              @PenAndrew haha no I’ll check it out!

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                              • Asyas_illos
                                Asyas_illos last edited by

                                Started a new sketch for storm any thoughts on concept or composition? Story is pretty simple just a pilot racing the storm and loving it!
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                                  Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

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                                  • Asyas_illos
                                    Asyas_illos last edited by

                                    Think I’m going anthropomorphic with this one open to animal suggestions!

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                                      PenAndrew @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                      @Asyas_illos The Falcon!

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                                      • Asyas_illos
                                        Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                                        I’m thinking bear, maybe panda?
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                                          Mike Marttila @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                          @Asyas_illos I think a panda would be a winner! The only caveat there would be to make sure that the black patches of fur don't get lost in the dark storm clouds. Looking forward to seeing how this one shapes up.

                                          P.S. Great work with the desert piece! I think you really nailed the sandstorm.

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                                            Asyas_illos @Mike Marttila last edited by

                                            @Mike-Marttila thank you and yes since I darkened the sky even more not sure how it’d work out.

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