May Storm Idea

[ArtistErin]

Just going through some of my thumbnails, and picked another one of two that I have decided in the "Storm" prompt...

The first one looked good in my mind until I started actually filling in detail and it seemed too confusing so I opted for the second, two birds on a tree in a windstorm, and wondering if this reads well to you? Should I draw the top of the tree so it's not cut off? And is there enough "interaction" with the problem at hand or should I adjust the gesture of the second bird to notice his skivvies about to come off instead of noticing his pants in the tree?

Ok and yes there is a half-moon going on with the lower bird, obviously very stressed as he's lost his pants and his whitie tighties are about to follow! I remember being "de-pants-ed" in 6th grade, which became the subject of many laughs, and horrible nightmares! This was the secondary "storm" story I wanted to tell here, the emotional turmoil one goes through upon losing their shorts.

[Asyas_illos]

@ArtistErin haha this is funny!

[Asyas_illos]

@ArtistErin I would probably omit the pants altogether. I think it’s funnier thinking they had underwear under all those feathers.

[HollyOakley]

This is brilliant. What a great story and your artwork depicts it perfectly. Well done.

[ArtistErin]

@Asyas_illos HA HA HA I might try that! See in the far background the other pair of pants from the other bird? It's probably too far away though?

[ArtistErin]

@HollyOakley Thank you!!! Do you think as an illustrator trying to convey a concept- a story, a situation… the emotion… also all that plays out like some form of animation in your head? The task now is what drives me to break that down. Then, from this place our job is to create a clear image from a stream of events? I am finding I really struggle with this, starting from a thumbnail then getting to further details and then what I thought initially was awesome just doesn’t work once I see the illustration progress.

Do you have ways they handle this weird impasse?

[ArtMelC]

I think the story concept and humour is super cool. However in the picture, I find it not immediately obvious that the hanging pants and the flying pants belonged to the birds. It looked like it could be someone else's pants that got stuck. Perhaps try a bunch of different positions for the pants and you can hit gold with the secondary story...

[ArtistErin]

@Melissa-Candrasaputra Thank you!! Yes I see how that is lost, I'll send an update! Trying to think outside my head and I do appreciate the feedback!

[ArtistErin]

Ok hoping to make progress here...How does this translate now? Just curious if it is clearer...

[Johanna Kim]

@ArtistErin This is rendered so well. Yes, I see your idea being expressed here very clearly.

[PenAndrew]

@ArtistErin Yes, even better than the first, communicates the feeling more and the storm. I love that texture that you have added.

[ArtistErin]

@Johanna-Kim Thank you so much Johanna!

[ArtistErin]

@PenAndrew Thank you Andrew!!!