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    • kirsten-mcg
      kirsten-mcg @Kori Jensen last edited by

      @Kori-Jensen Awesome! Looking forward to seeing your re-work...and future characters too!

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      • Melissa_Bailey
        Melissa_Bailey last edited by

        @Kori-Jensen love your color palette! Your character also is appealing -- appearing strong yet also possibly gentle and vulnerable. Very subtle yet excellent characterization.

        As far as feedback, you may want to consider adjusting:

        1. Values. While your palette is great, adjusting the values might help your character read even better. Hope you don't mind that I took a screenshot. Here is your piece in black and white:
          draw over 0.jpg
          Because your character's skin and hair is middle value, it could easily get lost. Here is an example of what it might look like with values adjusted: lightening and reducing the saturation of the background, and darkening her hair. Color and black & white are side by side:
          31ffe115-0bc5-4fab-a300-8d48e1f33a28-draw over values.jpg

        2. Anatomy & proportions. Even though this character isn't human, she does follow human proportions. In humans and most creatures, if you draw a line through the corners of the eyes, nose, and mouth, those lines are parallel. They are not quite parallel on this character, and it's throwing her facial proportions off. Here is a visual:
          333bda45-3cf6-4194-8a7d-198472053ef1-draw over 1.jpg
          Her arm also appears as if the elbow is overextended. Getting the anatomy and proportions down will make this character feel even more alive.

        Lastly, here is a visual of how making these small adjustments will change the piece.
        28286a42-581b-4edd-8e9a-4bc747982629-draw over 2.jpg

        Again, beautiful characterization. Love your linework. Looking forward to seeing where you decide to take it!

        illustrator - author - smiley person
        mbaileyart.com
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        • Kori Jensen
          Kori Jensen @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

          @Melissa_Bailey Hey there! very nice! I'll work on these things for sure and get back to you πŸ™‚ THANK YOU

          https://daddydudeler.wixsite.com/portfolio

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          • Melissa_Bailey
            Melissa_Bailey @Kori Jensen last edited by

            @Kori-Jensen you’re welcome! Glad it helped.

            illustrator - author - smiley person
            mbaileyart.com
            instagram.com/mbaileyart/

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            • Kori Jensen
              Kori Jensen @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

              @Melissa_Bailey Hey Melissa! Here are my edits, what do you think?Firlong.jpg

              https://daddydudeler.wixsite.com/portfolio

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              • Melissa_Bailey
                Melissa_Bailey @Kori Jensen last edited by

                @Kori-Jensen nice work! πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘

                illustrator - author - smiley person
                mbaileyart.com
                instagram.com/mbaileyart/

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                • willicreate
                  willicreate last edited by

                  This piece brings me back to my days playing Baldur's Gate 2. Your pic reminds me of a certain pink hair thief/mage. I have a few suggestions; hope you don't mind the draw over.
                  suggestions.jpg

                  I would recommend redrawing the left arm, so it would frame the character, as shown. Having her hold onto the right side of the cape also drawers eyes to the potions, reminding people of her job class.

                  If you use Photoshop, I would recommend using warp on the texture for the shoulder guard. As it is, it is breaking the illusion of a curved form.
                  shoulder-guard-warp.jpg

                  I meant to write this in your other post... I like your DnD work. Is it possible to combine your love of fantasy with children's books? There are a lot of kiddie books these days based on adult properties (Home Alone, Buffy the Vampire Slayer, X-Files, etc).

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                  • Kori Jensen
                    Kori Jensen @willicreate last edited by

                    @willicreate Holy guacamole πŸ™‚ I love your suggestions, hmm perhaps I should pass my line art by you next time LOL. Do you mind? These are some great ideas. Thank you!!!

                    https://daddydudeler.wixsite.com/portfolio

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                    • Kori Jensen
                      Kori Jensen @willicreate last edited by

                      @willicreate hmmm I do agree some people find my work more attuned to the adult and youth groups but I feel there is a place for my work πŸ™‚ thank you

                      https://daddydudeler.wixsite.com/portfolio

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                      • willicreate
                        willicreate @Kori Jensen last edited by willicreate

                        @Kori-Jensen I'm glad that was helpful. I'd be honored to provide any further assistance in your quest πŸ§™

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                        • willicreate
                          willicreate @Kori Jensen last edited by

                          @Kori-Jensen Understood. All the best.

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                          • Kori Jensen
                            Kori Jensen @willicreate last edited by

                            @willicreate Thank you so much I look forward to your thoughts πŸ˜ƒ

                            https://daddydudeler.wixsite.com/portfolio

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