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    • ArtistErin
      ArtistErin @AngelinaKizz last edited by

      @AngelinaKizz Ahhh like he died and he's just a dead body! EW yep ok losing the comatose friend.

      LMAO

      Erin Richardson
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      • Pamela Fraley
        Pamela Fraley SVS OG @ArtistErin last edited by

        @ArtistErin I like this concept. I agree with the others that the body is a bit dark. Maybe you could take it out and add the other bird back in. It was such a acute bird, I was a little sad to see him taken out.

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        • K
          katsuds last edited by

          I absolutely love this concept! I agree about taking out the background character. Loving the idea of adding the original bird back in and also keeping the boy. He adds more depth to the story. I don't think you need to fully see the genie but just having a hint of a genie is a good idea. We can definitely tell from the lamp what is about to happen. Love where you are going with this and I can't wait to see the finished piece. And side note, this could also work for the glow prompt. having the genie with a slight glow could be interesting. Excited for this.

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          • ArtistErin
            ArtistErin @Pamela Fraley last edited by

            @Pamela-Fraley I took him out initially because it seemed too busy with the friend laying there ha ha and looking at this again I see I can try it. It helps to have fresh eyes today:) I like this Blue Footed booby!

            kamari2 Booby.jpg

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            • mag
              mag Pro SVS OG @ArtistErin last edited by

              @ArtistErin I think this is awesome! 🀩and I do like it better without the second character lying on the beach, I must say 😊
              Maybe I would crop the image a little bit (loose a bit of the left side of your illustration), cause all the action is on the right side and it seams a bit off balance? But maybe that's just me. Great job!

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              • ArtistErin
                ArtistErin @mag last edited by

                @mag COOL! Thank you πŸ™‚

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                • Pamela Fraley
                  Pamela Fraley SVS OG @ArtistErin last edited by

                  @ArtistErin LOVE!! Your birds are adorable. 😊

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                  • ArtistErin
                    ArtistErin @Pamela Fraley last edited by

                    @Pamela-Fraley AWW thank you πŸ™‚

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                    • ArtistErin
                      ArtistErin last edited by

                      Kamari color...

                      Feeling hesitant to submit! Hope I'm making progress here. Wondering if this looks alright and clear, good rendering?

                      Thoughts welcome...

                      kamari2Color.jpg

                      Erin Richardson
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                      • Kim Rosenlof
                        Kim Rosenlof @ArtistErin last edited by

                        @ArtistErin This is looking good. I like your concept and the characters. I think that the ship is lost in this version. I think you need to make sure it is more visible since it tells us the "end" part of the prompt. Also, watch for the tangent of the right bird and the ocean horizon line. I also like that you are using a limited pallet.

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                        • LittleRaven
                          LittleRaven @ArtistErin last edited by

                          @ArtistErin I really like your concept. As for my feedback, my attention is really drawn to the bird on the right. I think this is because it has the most colour contrast on its beak (the bright saturated orange against the blue background), maybe make the orange a little less saturated. And I think the other bird should also look at the lamp, now it's just looking at the birds feet and nothing is going there. Keep up the good work!

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                          • ArtistErin
                            ArtistErin last edited by ArtistErin

                            Kamari update...

                            Needed to make the shipwreck more clear and also show Kamari just discovered a hidden treasure chest. What do think about the crabs I added? Trying to avoid over rendering the sand but do you think it needs something?
                            @Kim-Rosenlof thank you for your feedback! So much appreciation πŸ™‚ I see the eyes on the blue footed booby need to be more clear but otherwise I think I'll go ahead and submit this.

                            kamari2 copy.jpg

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                            • Asyas_illos
                              Asyas_illos @ArtistErin last edited by

                              @ArtistErin this looks really good I’m glad you did away with β€œthe body” lol. I do think the crabs clutter it a bit though.

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                              • ArtistErin
                                ArtistErin @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                @Asyas_illos πŸ˜‚ Awesome... thank you πŸ™‚

                                Erin Richardson
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                                • ArtMelC
                                  ArtMelC @ArtistErin last edited by

                                  @ArtistErin I think remove the text on the boat. I made me think Kamari is the boat name instead of the boy. Your story is much clearer without!

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                                  • ArtistErin
                                    ArtistErin @ArtMelC last edited by ArtistErin

                                    @ArtMelC Thank you πŸ™‚

                                    I guess the text does confuse, I learned about naming boats and ships- one does put their own name and location on their boat but in this way it feels like the boat is the character named Kamari and not the kid.

                                    This prompt has turned me inside out! Thanks for your insight...

                                    Erin Richardson
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                                    • ArtistErin
                                      ArtistErin @LittleRaven last edited by

                                      @LittleRaven Thank you! LOL I tried changing the bird's position to give variation and didn't realize until you pointed it out how he looks in the wrong direction. Trying to not have to redraw him. So much for the lazy approach!

                                      Erin Richardson
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