End of the line…wip ^_^

Asyas_illos

@mag thanks! I’ll see if I can work something like that out

Asyas_illos

@MarcRobinson thank you I’m glad the story is clear.

marek.halko

Hi Asya, i think Mag has a good point about moving the boat a little more down right. For the side view, maybe few hints of perspective and some light/shadow shifts would put the scene more in an environment and make it feel more dynamic? Could a view from up also work for the story?

Asyas_illos

@marek-halko thanks for the redraw it totally helps me visualize! I don’t know about a top view but moving the boat is more feasible.

Asyas_illos

@marek-halko also how does your pile of fish look so much better than mine?! lol!

marek.halko

@Asyas_illos well, i just love drawing fish.

Miriam

@marek-halko said in End of the line…wip ^_^:

well, i just love drawing fish

This made me laugh!

Miriam

@Asyas_illos The cat & dog chase scene—turned escape to sea—is a good concept. I like that the dogs look friendly (they are so cute!) and just want to play, so it wouldn't really be the end for kitty Kamari—except maybe the end of the cat's dignity if the dogs covered Kamari in dog slobber!

I think the straight-on side view works well with your style.

I also like the way @marek-halko drew the water. It adds more movement and excitement to the piece. I also like the bouy in the water & the way the ship is sitting low in the water with the big haul of fish in the drawover. And I agree, nice job on the pile of fish.

AngelinaKizz

@Asyas_illos with this one, I would like to see that the cat is going to land in the boat... so maybe have him more mid air?

Chantal Goetheer

@Asyas_illos I liked the leg of the fisherman seeing as if he's really hauling something in one of the first sketches. The point of view with the quay side more up and boat more down is really nice and dynamic especially when the cat is already jumping more petrified into the void because she maybe doesn't see the boat with the fish yet. Great idea yet again!

Asyas_illos

@Chantal-Goetheer thanks! ️

Asyas_illos

@AngelinaKizz thank you I did end moving the cat maybe it looks a little more believable now?

Here’s the progress from the past two days took some of you fine peoples advice into account and rearranged this a tad. I’m still working on the fishing part of it, positioning of the line, fish, and fish pile etc.

AngelinaKizz

@Asyas_illos it looks great!

Asyas_illos

Do you think the little dog is one dog too many?

Chantal Goetheer

@Asyas_illos i do like it adding to that white big pas. And the little doggies are the most ferocious

Chantal Goetheer

Paw instead of pas

@Asyas_illos I think it's fine with or without the little dog.
Lovely illustration. The cat is great!

Asyas_illos

@Stephanie-H thanks Stephanie!

Asyas_illos

Here’s a little update, still some things to work on, let me know if you see anything that stands out

kirsten-mcg

@Asyas_illos this is looking so cute! Just one suggestion, maybe add a darker line to the fisherman’s sleeve to help it stand out more? I was at first confused with the blob of yellow and had to look really closely before I could make sense of his pose.