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    End of the line…wip ^_^

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    • Chantal Goetheer
      Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

      @Asyas_illos i do like it adding to that white big pas. And the little doggies are the most ferocious 😀

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      • Chantal Goetheer
        Chantal Goetheer @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

        Paw instead of pas

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          A Former User @Asyas_illos last edited by

          @Asyas_illos I think it's fine with or without the little dog.
          Lovely illustration. The cat is great!

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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos @Guest last edited by

            @Stephanie-H thanks Stephanie!

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            • Asyas_illos
              Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

              Here’s a little update, still some things to work on, let me know if you see anything that stands out😊
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              • kirsten-mcg
                kirsten-mcg @Asyas_illos last edited by

                @Asyas_illos this is looking so cute! Just one suggestion, maybe add a darker line to the fisherman’s sleeve to help it stand out more? I was at first confused with the blob of yellow and had to look really closely before I could make sense of his pose.

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos @kirsten-mcg last edited by

                  @kirsten-mcg good idea thanks!

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos last edited by

                    Ok I am gonna sit on this for a bit, I think it’s pretty much done though, thanks to all those who helped me out with their wonderful feedback!
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                    • AngelinaKizz
                      AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                      @Asyas_illos what I think you can get rid of is the Danes back leg. It’s hard to read it as the leg and my eye goes straight there because of the high contrast. It would be highly plausible that while running his back leg wouldn’t be visible so I don’t think it’ll look off to lose it. I do like the little dog as he fills in the space in front of the sheep dog and adds balance to your large and small shape distribution.

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                      • Asyas_illos
                        Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by Asyas_illos

                        @AngelinaKizz thanks I’ll work with it!

                        Ok I wondered what it might look like as a boardwalk instead of stone pier, any thoughts? It’s just a rough of course.
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                        • allysa
                          allysa @Asyas_illos last edited by

                          @Asyas_illos this is lovely! Personally, I think the empty space of the wooden pier is distracting from the action - the stones blended a bit more and allowed the drama of the dogs and the cat to catch the eye more quickly. I love the concept 🙂

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                          • ajillustrates
                            ajillustrates @Asyas_illos last edited by

                            @Asyas_illos Hmmm... that's a tough one. I think the boardwalk can work well, but I prefer the stone pier. This may just be pure subjective preference, but it the stones kinda helps make the whole background become a cool analagous color scheme, letting the warmth of the characters stand out. if you stick with the stone, I'd just either darken or lighten the portion of the fishing line that overlaps the wall and goes into the water to separate it. Oh, and I agree with @AngelinaKizz - the back leg of the dane sucks my eye to edge of piece, instead of letting it flow through the action of the dogs to the cat. I'd lose it. Whichever direction you go, I love the style and the characters - this is awesome work!

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                              Asyas_illos @ajillustrates last edited by

                              @ajillustrates thanks for the feedback! I’m torn between them!

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                              • Chantal Goetheer
                                Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                @Asyas_illos me and my son both like the wall more. Though they both look good that broadwalk is more present while it's more a background item.

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                                • Asyas_illos
                                  Asyas_illos @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

                                  @Chantal-Goetheer thank you, very helpful!

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                                  • Asyas_illos
                                    Asyas_illos last edited by

                                    Here’s a side by side comparison
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                                    • Chantal Goetheer
                                      Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                      @Asyas_illos the wall. The broadwalk catches the eye too much.

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                                      • AngelinaKizz
                                        AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                        @Asyas_illos the wall!!! It's fantastic and draws the attention to the boat.

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                                        • Mia Clarke
                                          Mia Clarke @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                          @Asyas_illos Love this illo, it's my favourite of your Kamaris thus far. 👏👏👏 The big white dog dissappears into the background for me, and I didn't see him until I zoomed in. Maybe you could make it grayer to give it more of a silhouette?

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                                          • MarcRobinson
                                            MarcRobinson @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                            @Asyas_illos I'm definitely drawn more to the wall version. It's a really great concept and such a well painted piece. Fantastic.

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