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    End of the line…wip ^_^

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    • AngelinaKizz
      AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

      @Asyas_illos what I think you can get rid of is the Danes back leg. It’s hard to read it as the leg and my eye goes straight there because of the high contrast. It would be highly plausible that while running his back leg wouldn’t be visible so I don’t think it’ll look off to lose it. I do like the little dog as he fills in the space in front of the sheep dog and adds balance to your large and small shape distribution.

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      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by Asyas_illos

        @AngelinaKizz thanks I’ll work with it!

        Ok I wondered what it might look like as a boardwalk instead of stone pier, any thoughts? It’s just a rough of course.
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        • allysa
          allysa @Asyas_illos last edited by

          @Asyas_illos this is lovely! Personally, I think the empty space of the wooden pier is distracting from the action - the stones blended a bit more and allowed the drama of the dogs and the cat to catch the eye more quickly. I love the concept 🙂

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          • ajillustrates
            ajillustrates @Asyas_illos last edited by

            @Asyas_illos Hmmm... that's a tough one. I think the boardwalk can work well, but I prefer the stone pier. This may just be pure subjective preference, but it the stones kinda helps make the whole background become a cool analagous color scheme, letting the warmth of the characters stand out. if you stick with the stone, I'd just either darken or lighten the portion of the fishing line that overlaps the wall and goes into the water to separate it. Oh, and I agree with @AngelinaKizz - the back leg of the dane sucks my eye to edge of piece, instead of letting it flow through the action of the dogs to the cat. I'd lose it. Whichever direction you go, I love the style and the characters - this is awesome work!

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            • Asyas_illos
              Asyas_illos @ajillustrates last edited by

              @ajillustrates thanks for the feedback! I’m torn between them!

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              • Chantal Goetheer
                Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                @Asyas_illos me and my son both like the wall more. Though they both look good that broadwalk is more present while it's more a background item.

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

                  @Chantal-Goetheer thank you, very helpful!

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos last edited by

                    Here’s a side by side comparison
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                    • Chantal Goetheer
                      Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                      @Asyas_illos the wall. The broadwalk catches the eye too much.

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                      • AngelinaKizz
                        AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                        @Asyas_illos the wall!!! It's fantastic and draws the attention to the boat.

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                        • Mia Clarke
                          Mia Clarke @Asyas_illos last edited by

                          @Asyas_illos Love this illo, it's my favourite of your Kamaris thus far. 👏👏👏 The big white dog dissappears into the background for me, and I didn't see him until I zoomed in. Maybe you could make it grayer to give it more of a silhouette?

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                          • MarcRobinson
                            MarcRobinson @Asyas_illos last edited by

                            @Asyas_illos I'm definitely drawn more to the wall version. It's a really great concept and such a well painted piece. Fantastic.

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                            • Asyas_illos
                              Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                              Well the wall it is then thanks everyone!

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                              • Asyas_illos
                                Asyas_illos last edited by

                                Ok I’ve done it again folks another Kamari idea popped into my head just now, it’s not too creative a story and possibly a bit dark. What do you guys think? Sorry for the very rough sketch!
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                                • Griffin McPherson
                                  Griffin McPherson @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                  @Asyas_illos I really like this one! This one is definitely my favorite of your Kamari ideas so far. Don’t have much feedback at this point other than keeping going!

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                                  • Asyas_illos
                                    Asyas_illos @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                                    @Griffin-McPherson awesome me too!

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                                    • marek.halko
                                      marek.halko @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                      @Asyas_illos The stone works pretty good. I would personally prefer the walkboard (somehow imagining the story with that), it would make the picture too busy though... but there is always way how to cheat with background and placing objects in the shadow or light. Something like this for instance:

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                                      • Asyas_illos
                                        Asyas_illos @marek.halko last edited by

                                        Thank you for the feedback @marek-halko your simplicity never ceases to amaze me! You seriously have a gift, it seems to come so naturally for you. You are the epitome of work smarter not harder. Have you published anything yet? I will buy it no joke.

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                                        • Asyas_illos
                                          Asyas_illos last edited by

                                          Think I’m set on this color comp, I want it very green to represent the energy of life and nature.
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                                          • Sarah VanDam
                                            Sarah VanDam @marek.halko last edited by

                                            @marek-halko Wow, the swell of the water is such an interesting design idea, and really adds to the tension of the piece, too!

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