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@NessIllustration the text spot’s definitely have to change, no question about that. I like the idea of making the hallways a bit darker as it goes back but I don’t want it to look as if the lights in the back are off.
I’ve been wondering about that rope since the beginning, it could definitely be toned down. An issue with the mirror that my friends pointed out is that it’s about the same size as the kids head which makes it stand out on top of how bright it is so I’ll be adjusting that as well. I can see how the characters could stand out more but I don’t want to lose the objects in the hallway too much because I want the hallway to feel like a bit of a character itself and my hope is that viewers get a little lost in it.Thanks so much for your help and feedback!
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@Griffin-McPherson I wouldn't worry too much, we can still see the objects very well even if you tone them way down
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@AngelinaKizz I’m afraid if I get too strict with the perspective rules that it will mess me up because in the past when I’ve bent perspective around I’ve learned that if I start to follow the rules too closely then more of it looks wrong because it isn’t all perfectly lined up.
I think another reason this would be challenging is because I would be applying 5 point perspective to a space that physically bending around with the floor of the hallway bending back in space and the walls are acutely bending away from each other in a v shape which I did in order to show the objects on the walls more clearly rather than looking down at the tops of objects. I think I will still play around with bending the clock, the bells, and the poncho around though because they’re larger objects.
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@Nyrryl-Cadiz hmm, I worry that having both of the text spots right next to each other might look a little weird because I think they’re usually more staggered. However, I can’t find any examples of illustrations with room for text! I’ve looked through a bunch fi the picture books I have and I’ve searched google but I just can’t find examples to see how others do it
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Revisions! Used a bit of everyone’s suggestions so thank you to all of you! The only thing I’m still wondering about it the room fort text. Though I do think they look better I still think they feel a bit odd, maybe compute the texture of the wood in those areas but still keeping any line art out of those spots would work? Let me know!
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@Griffin-McPherson i don't think they look odd, the text is misssing and thats why i guess. If it still fells odd with text, maybe we can brainstorm again?
i really like the illustration! I admire how you are able to just make the changes. i mostly feel if its done its done and i will think about what i got as critique for the next piece. I should work on that though.
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@Griffin-McPherson looks great! I think once you put some text in, it'll feel right. If not, then you could add some of the line work underneath at a reduced opacity. Great piece!
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@von_Nimmermehr it’s hard to go back and do revisions once you get in the mindset of being done with it. I don’t usually go back and do revisions like this but it’s rewarding to be able to improve it from the point of what I thought was completion. I haven’t actually had to deal with someone telling me I need to make revisions since art school I’m trying to get more comfortable with revisions again.
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I know I’m getting into nitpicking territory but can the room for text spots still work with the lines of the woods boards running through them or should I have them faded out?
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@Griffin-McPherson have you tried placing text over top and seeing how it looks?
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@AngelinaKizz I have, it kind of works both ways but of course the faded lines adds a bit more clarity
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@Griffin-McPherson i would go with the faded lines then
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@Griffin-McPherson I like the very faded lines!
