Fundamentals and Composition - Feedback please
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So, hello, my name is Juliana Soares, I am a brazillian architect, illustrator and comic artist. I was watching the composition and fundamentals classes, and took a bit to seriously Jake's assingment of drawing a house.
Tried to do a bit of storytelling, value and composition. I am still trying to figure out how to draw less atenttion to the trees on the background.... but, if anyone has any feedback, I would love to hear.Thanks!
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@Juliana-Soares That rabbit is soo cute! Love your house with story. As for the trees, maybe try to have them almost the same value/colour as the grass. And make the line work more blurry/vague. The road distracted a bit from the house and rabbit because of the thicker lines marking it. Would really like seeing this in colour!
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@Juliana-Soares Ditto on what @Chantal-Goetheer said. Such a cute rabbit, and a lovely looking house.
I'll add a few suggestions too:
-You could try the trees with no line work at all: just colour shapes against a backdrop that's a similar value,
-The perspective is odd because the house looks like it's sitting on a flat area, as does the river, but the whole background looks like it slopes steeply upwards. So you could play around with the background perspective, and the trees could overlap a lot more,
-The rabbit's ears get cropped off at the top of the image - it would be good to see more there.
I'd also love to see this in colour!
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If this is at night, you can go much darker. But maybe make the fire pit smoldering so it doesn’t compete with the kid holding the flashlight. -
Maybe even have the chair and fire pit swap with the kid so the bunny looks like it’s watching the kid
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@kayleenartlover yes, or maybe the bunny is the one that really knows what happened hehe
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@Robyn-Hepburn tahnk you! After posting this I thought about making some mountains on the back or something else. You guys are right. it seems flat.
And the original had the bunny's ears. I wanted to keep it but I was trying to get the composition right... I got a bit lost. Anyway, i will improve this!!
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@Juliana-Soares I'm sure you will, and it'll be great! Sometimes you work on something so long you can't see it clearly anymore. Some good advice I got was to put the drawing aside for a while, then when you come back to it you'll see it with fresh eyes.
