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    Update: Treehouse WIP Witch one works better?

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    • Jose Ramos
      Jose Ramos last edited by

      The third is the best, but I find the foreground very empty....maybe a big bottle in the foreground?

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      • tombarrettillo
        tombarrettillo last edited by

        3rd gets my vote

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        • Leontine
          Leontine @smceccarelli last edited by

          @smceccarelli Good suggestion Simona, thank you!

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          • Leontine
            Leontine last edited by

            @aska @Dennis-Spaans @Doha @lmrush @rcartwright @tombarrettillo Thank you for getting me back on track! @smceccarelli Good Suggestion, Ill try that! @Jose-Ramos Thanks for suggesting the comp. Il give it a push!

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            • MOO
              MOO SVS OG last edited by

              I also like 3 the best. Love the fishing and bottles 🙂

              Marsha Ottum Owen

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              • Leontine
                Leontine @MOO last edited by

                @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen Thank you! Is it clear that he is the one putting 'help' bottles in the water?

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                • aska
                  aska @Leontine last edited by

                  @Leontine It looks like he is fishing for them, so other way. But this way story is also cool.

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                  • Leontine
                    Leontine @aska last edited by

                    @aska Thank you, perhaps Ill change it a bit, so it wil be clearer.

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                    • Leontine
                      Leontine last edited by

                      how about this?0_1497956384454_leontine treehouse lonelyness.png

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                      • NoWayMe
                        NoWayMe last edited by NoWayMe

                        @Leontine, I agree with everyone about #3 🙂 I like the original version better than the modified one.. Even with the bottles on the rod, it looks like he is fishing them (and it looks a little odd). I think the problem is that if he wanted to put them in the water, he would just throw them... I think the story is really good if he is fishing for the bottles, but if you want him to be the one who put them there, then I would get rid of the fishing rod completely and just have him throw a bottle out of the window.

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                          smithdraws @Leontine last edited by

                          @Leontine This does read as the character sending the bottles out. Cool concept. Maybe keeping the bottles on a trawling line increases his chance of getting help (if that's his intent). Does he need help because his boat is broken? If so could the boat come to the foreground and maybe have a smoky motor? Your art really has some cool story possibilities.

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                          • Leontine
                            Leontine @smithdraws last edited by

                            @smithdraws Thank you! The Idea was, 'the guy ' was shipwrecked and got stuck there. He has used part of his boat to make himself a house, but as time passes, the island is getting smaller and smaller... or perhaps he really wanted to stay, at first, but he gets lonely and decides to try and call for help ?

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                            • MOO
                              MOO SVS OG @Leontine last edited by

                              @Leontine Actually, I didn't get that. I thought he was fishing FOR a bottle...which really doesn't make sense when I think about it 🙂 Sending out bottles makes more sense 🙂 Nevertheless, I didn't really get it. Sorry.

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                              • MOO
                                MOO SVS OG @MOO last edited by

                                @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen I think NoWayMe has it right. Just toss the bottles in and get rid of the fishing line and rod.

                                Marsha Ottum Owen

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                                • tombarrettillo
                                  tombarrettillo last edited by

                                  @Jose-Ramos mentioned the foreground being a bit empty, and I agree. Maybe instead of a large bottle, how about moving the shipwreck to the foreground, which would help clarify the story and why he is tossing bottles, and add some interest. Would guide the eye a bit better. Right now the shipwreck is fairly hidden behind the hill.

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                                  • Leontine
                                    Leontine @MOO last edited by

                                    @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen XD

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                                    • Leontine
                                      Leontine last edited by

                                      How about now... ?
                                      0_1497978329934_leontine illustrator.png

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                                      • aska
                                        aska last edited by

                                        Its cool, but perhaphs consider puting the falling bottle a bit lower so it doesnt overlap with the house

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                                          smithdraws @Leontine last edited by

                                          @Leontine Wow there was even more to the story than I thought 👍🏻

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                                          • Leontine
                                            Leontine @aska last edited by

                                            @aska I did, wait till you see the finished version!

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