Tree house WIP

Jose Ramos

ree house railings. Nice work.

Hey, Thanks a lot...how do you think I can fix it?

tombarrettillo

Not sure if anyone has mentioned this, but the treehouse is brighter than the rabbit, which draws me to the treehouse first. Perhaps tone down the light in the doorway and window, and some of the glow on the house, and have a ray of the sunset focused on the rabbit. Also, took me a second to realize the bar dividing the doorway was in fact one of the posts holding up the porch roof. I would move the door opening to be more centered under the roof peak so as to avoid that confusing split.

Jose Ramos

@tombarrettillo Hi Tom, yes I agree with your comments.
The treehose is not so bright like before, some glow around the tree and house has been added.
And the sunshine is there too, maybe is it so soft?
I´ve improved the doorway ...what you think?

tombarrettillo

Very nice! Light and colors are good. My only pic (and it is a very small one) would be the small bit of light coming thru at the corner of the gray tree.

smithdraws

@Jose-Ramos What about taking down the tree house and background color saturations about 5 to 10 percent? It would give some atmospheric perspective and help focus attention on the character. Also what if the rabbit's expression was, "determined," rather than scared? Scared seems like he is running away from something. Isn't he actually determined to save his friend? Great job by the way!

Jose Ramos

Hey, thanks guys for your advices, they´re welcome.
I´ve added a light coming thru at the corner of the gray tree, and desaturated the background 10%, I´ve created a layer of orange solid with opacity 20%, so the atmospheric felling is better.
The character expression now is determined, so I think is better than scared.

smithdraws

@Jose-Ramos Awesome

evilrobot

This is looking great. You solved the problem with that top ear but I still see the tangent with the bottom ear and the the bottom rail. I'd make that ear come out and drop lower than the bottom rail. Right now they are curving together almost making one continuous line.

Jose Ramos

@smithdraws Thanks dude!

Jose Ramos

@evilrobot Aaaaah, now I see what you wanted to say.I know what tangent means. Thanks and check it out.

aska

@Jose-Ramos its such a cool picture that i have to make you consider another change...;) i like the bluish colours more, they look more deep... are you sure about red colours? I know, that everyone has different taste and opinion so dont worry about my opinion,, if you dont agree

Jose Ramos

@aska Hi Aska, thans for your comment, well, I´m not sure about red colours, but they do not dislike me either.
I´ve tried to change the background color, and make it more late in time...I mean, more night time.
which do you like more?

aska

Still blue ... I looked closer at all versions and I think that, what drawns me to the blue version is texture and delicate look. Also Iam not sure of strong reflections on the tree in the last two versions. Perhaps you could tone your colours down a bit, add texture and make the reflections a bit more delicate? Its really a cool picture tho and cam impressed how easily you change rabbit expressions without changing the rabbit itself

Jose Ramos

@aska Hey, thanks for your great advices Aska, the blue version is the last one that I uploaded right?....Thanks a lot!

aska

@Jose-Ramos its the first coloured version from 2 days ago (bluish, greenish background)

Jose Ramos

@aska Ok, I´ve added texture, and I think I have 3 options, A,B,C... My favourite is B.

NoWayMe

@Jose-Ramos Wow! This is really progressing well! I vote for B

I would suggest adding a little more space between the top of the treehouse and the big branch of the tree in the foreground (maybe that branch could be slightly smaller ?). Right now it feels a little crowded.

I think the story is funny, but not perfectly clear in your image. Changing his expression helped a lot! I am thinking what if you would add a letter flying in the distance (a ransom letter) It would be like he read the letter, grabbed his bike and left fast to collect acorns and left the letter behind him. It's a little hard to explain! I will try to do a paint over tonight if it's not clear!

And maybe his worm friend could be sitting on his shoulder ? looking terrorized.

But I really love where you are taking this

Leontine

Lovely comp! Love the colors of all of them. I really like the last one. I have another suggestion, The Rooster with the arrow, I should point him towards the rabbit. Then It draws your eyes inwards, now its pointing towards the branch (out of the illustration) . I think you really don't want to put attention there. A worm friend makes the illustration more fun, Kids love litte jokes or 'easter eggs'. Good luck, your almost there!

Jose Ramos

Worm, letter and more space on yhe top

tombarrettillo

I don't think it needs any texture. Kind of muddies it up a bit, especially the characters