Reworking an old piece- pumpkin patch- rendering stage
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Wow, thanks guys! You've given me a lot of things to think about. I'll have to play around with your suggestions and see what works.
@aska Yeah, that's what I was thinking. I really liked the feel I was getting from the pose in the first one, and I'd rather convey "proudness", rather than rushing.
Thanks so much for all your help.
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Ok, I kind of changed it a bit, because I was liking the pose in the first one better. I wanted him to look proud and confident rather than rushing after his parents. Do you think this one is working?
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@tessw Quick question, does the kid have super strength or is he just carrying the three pumpkins? I ask cause it might be cool to have all three pumpkins balance on the left arm and the right arm swinging back like "Look at me" but if he is just a normal boy then this works well.
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@chip-valecek Hmm, I'll play around with that! He is super strong. . . but just in his imagination, which is why I made it so the parents aren't noticing him.
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I just realized his arm probably wouldn't be swinging that way if his legs were like that, in version c. Oops.
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@tessw If you did go that route I like B where you can see his face and the confidence he has.
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Version B looks very cool. However, i think i like the original more. He is more childish there and its cute.
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Laying in some colors. . . I'm always nervous starting the colors!
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There is so much about this that is working and that I relate to. Firstly I'm a big Superman fan so there's that
Composition is easy to read and interesting. I don't mind that there is some ambiguity in the story; meaning, is he actually a super kid or just super imaginative? I live that last line of text and how the image plays with that. Just a side note that having the boy enter from the left is a good move as it sticks to the cinematic rule of thumb that "good guys," enter from the frame from the left. If you watch star wars, Vader tends to enter from the right and Jedis from the left. Just a fun factoid 
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@smithdraws OMG I love analyzing cinematography. There's so much psychology in it. I didn't even know this!
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@withlinesofink It makes sense to me to study cinematography since it's the ultimate form of sequential art. A picture book or comic is just a time lapse.
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Very nice!
Although, you might want to rethink the clouds. They really transfer the focal point from the boy carrying the 3 pumpkins to his family. The way it is now. I see the family before the boy (even if he is much bigger and brighter - directional lines are very powerful).
Otherwise, nice work!! Definitely MUCH better composition than your original!
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@nowayme Aw man! I really wanted to try out those clouds. Guess I'll have to save them for another piece. But, good point. I'll play around with the clouds. Thanks for the feedback!
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@smithdraws said in Reworking on old piece- Composition help.:
@tessw
There is so much about this that is working and that I relate to. Firstly I'm a big Superman fan so there's that Composition is easy to read and interesting. I don't mind that there is some ambiguity in the story; meaning, is he actually a super kid or just super imaginative? I live that last line of text and how the image plays with that. Just a side note that having the boy enter from the left is a good move as it sticks to the cinematic rule of thumb that "good guys," enter from the frame from the left. If you watch star wars, Vader tends to enter from the right and Jedis from the left. Just a fun factoid Well done so far!Thanks! Good thing @Kevin-Longueil and @Chip-Valecek set me straight as far as him entering from the left. Didn't want him to be a bad guy.
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Making progress. Still need to refine the shading, unify the cast shadows color-wise, and add bounce light from the ground and fill light from the sky, among other things. Is there anything you can see that I need to look out for as I complete this piece? How does the sky look without clouds?
Also I was wondering, if I end up putting this on a portfolio website, do I include the text and gutter or do I leave them out?
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@tessw Really shaping into a strong piece. What if you painted in clouds that directed toward the boy? I'd keep the text because the art and text play off of each other. I'd ditch the gutter.
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@tessw This looks GREAT! As far as putting it up on your site, I would think the text is fine but remove the gutter line. But then again I may be wrong about that. I just think it would look great without the division in it.
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@tessw Love this composition and perspective. Also love the characters poses.
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@tessw said in Reworking an old piece- pumpkin patch- rendering stage:
do I include the text and gutter or do I leave them out?
The AD at Random House who reviewed my portfolio said to leave out the gutter unless you're showing 2 pages together (like 2 illustrations). But having text is always AWESOME because it shows you understand what's needed for a book. If you can design the text well, that's even better.
